Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Fix tense, articles and word order (e.g. “my grade-level maths teacher”, “he always gives me advice on managing time”). Keep to under five sentences.

예시: My favourite teacher is my grade-level maths teacher, Mr Bondar. He is very good at explaining methods clearly, and he always gives me practical advice on how to manage time during maths exams. Because of his tips, I finish papers more calmly and make fewer careless mistakes.

제안: Give a direct answer and then one clear reason with correct grammar. Use linking words like ‘because’ and avoid fragmented sentences. Replace vague phrases with specific points (e.g. ‘lack confidence’ → ‘I don’t feel confident managing a classroom’).

예시: No, I don’t want to be a teacher in the future because I don’t feel confident managing a classroom or explaining concepts to children. For example, I find it difficult to speak in front of large groups, so I prefer a job where I work more independently.

제안: Answer directly, then give one specific and appropriate detail about why you remember them. Avoid informal or unclear expressions (e.g. ‘cute and beautiful girl’ and repeated words). Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘for example’.

예시: Yes, I remember my grade 9 religion teacher, Ms Malshi Vikram Singh. I remember her because she encouraged me to participate in class and always explained difficult ideas with patience, which made me feel supported.

제안: Be clear and use correct vocabulary for sensitive topics. Start with a direct answer, then briefly explain. Use simple, correct sentences and avoid confusing words (‘died’, ‘touch’ used oddly).

예시: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers because they passed away last year. I would like to contact them if it were possible, but sadly that is not possible now.

제안: Respond with a clear topic sentence then two specific ways the teacher helped, using linking words (e.g. ‘for example’, ‘as a result’). Correct grammar (e.g. ‘helped me to manage my time’, ‘I struggle with exam stress’). Avoid hesitation sounds and fragments.

예시: He helped me to manage my time during exams and to practise exam techniques. For example, he taught me how to allocate time to each question and how to check answers quickly, so I now feel less stressed and finish papers on time.

× Yes I have a favorite teacher for my grade level maths teacher.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher for my grade level: my math teacher.

The sentence misuses articles and repeats 'teacher'. Use the definite or possessive structure to specify 'my math teacher'. Also 'maths' is commonly 'math' in this context. Add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× His name is Mr. Bondar and I think he's the best method maths teacher in my life ever made because he always give me advice to how to manage the time to their mathematics paper and anything.

✓ His name is Mr. Bondar, and I think he's the best math teacher I've ever had because he always gives me advice on how to manage time in math exams and more.

Multiple errors: subject-verb agreement ('give' -> 'gives'); incorrect phrase 'best method maths teacher' -> 'best math teacher'; wrong tense/form 'in my life ever made' -> 'I've ever had' (present perfect); incorrect preposition 'advice to how' -> 'advice on how'; 'their mathematics paper' -> 'math exams'. Fixing these produces a natural sentence.

× No, actually I didn't like to be a teacher in the future because I think I can't teach children too good because I have not.

✓ No, actually I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I think I couldn't teach children very well.

The student used past tense 'didn't like' incorrectly for future intention; use present tense 'don't want'. Also 'too good' should be 'very well' (adverb). 'I have not.' is incomplete and unnecessary; replace with 'I couldn't' to express inability.

× Good confidence in the teaching study.

✓ I don't have good confidence in teaching.

Fragment lacks subject and verb. 'Teaching study' is awkward; 'in teaching' is appropriate. Provide a full clause with subject and verb.

× Yes why not I have a teacher from my past that I still remember in my grade 9 religion teacher her name is Malshi Vikram Singh.

✓ Yes, of course I do. I still remember my grade 9 religion teacher; her name is Malshi Vikram Singh.

Run-on and missing articles/punctuation. Add 'my' before 'grade 9 religion teacher' and separate into two clauses. 'Why not' is unnatural here; 'of course I do' fits better.

× I think she is very cute and beautiful girl and she always she love love me and I love her and I think.

✓ I think she was a very kind and pretty woman; she always showed me affection and I admired her.

Pronoun and noun number/age issues: 'beautiful girl' for a teacher is awkward; 'woman' or 'teacher' is better. Repetition 'she always she love love me' is ungrammatical; express as 'she showed me affection'. Remove trailing 'and I think' which is incomplete.

× No, I still in touch with my primary school teacher because they are now died, died in the last year and I think I like to still touch with the teachers, but I can't eat.

✓ No, I'm not still in touch with my primary school teachers because they died last year. I would like to stay in touch, but I can't now.

Grammar issues: missing auxiliary in 'I still in touch' -> 'I'm not still in touch' (or 'I'm not in touch'). 'They are now died' incorrect verb form -> 'they died'. 'I like to still touch with' wrong verb and preposition -> 'I would like to stay in touch'. 'but I can't eat' is nonsense in context; likely 'but I can't' or 'but I can't now' fixes it.

× I think my favorite teacher helped me to how to manage the time on papers because, uh, sometimes I have not good.

✓ I think my favorite teacher helped me learn how to manage time on exams because sometimes I'm not good at it.

'Helped me to how to' is incorrect; use 'helped me learn how to'. 'On papers' -> 'on exams' or 'in exams'. 'I have not good' is ungrammatical; use 'I'm not good at it'.

× I am not good patient people because I have, uh, struggle with all time with my exam stress.

✓ I am not a patient person because I always struggle with exam stress.

'Good patient people' wrong word order and number; use 'a patient person'. 'I have struggle with all time' -> 'I always struggle'. Use 'exam stress' without 'my' unless referring to personal possession.

× I think, uh, I haven't good.

✓ I think, uh, I'm not very good at that.

'I haven't good' is ungrammatical; use contraction 'I'm not' and include the object 'at that' to clarify what the student is not good at.