Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason with a brief example. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct grammar (e.g., “listening to” and “listening to sad music”). Aim for 2–3 sentences and reduce hesitation sounds (uh, umm).

예시: I prefer listening to happy music rather than sad music because it lifts my mood and makes me feel energetic. For example, when I play upbeat songs in the morning, I feel more motivated to start my day.

제안: Answer directly and with correct verb forms. Use one clear topic sentence, then add a specific reason using linking words (because, since). Avoid fillers and repeating words. Provide a concise example or result to support your point.

예시: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because the upbeat tempo and cheerful lyrics boost my energy levels. For instance, when I listen to lively pop songs before exercising, I feel more motivated and energetic.

× I I prefer listening to happy music rather than sad music.

✓ I prefer listening to happy music rather than sad music.

Remove the repeated 'I'. The sentence is otherwise correct; 'prefer listening to' correctly uses the verb + -ing form after 'prefer'.

× because sad music just just make me feel really bad and make me feel gloomy, so I don't prefer listening sad music.

✓ because sad music just makes me feel really bad and makes me feel gloomy, so I don't prefer listening to sad music.

Subject-verb agreement requires 'sad music' (singular) with the third person singular verb form 'makes' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27 and 2). Also add 'to' after 'listening' because the correct pattern is 'listen to' or 'listening to' when followed by an object.

× Uh, happiness made me feel more excited and happy, umm, because uh, you know, uh, happy music contains a sort of, of a positive energy, uh, rather than gloomy feeling and, uh.

✓ Happiness makes me feel more excited and happy because, you know, happy music contains a kind of positive energy rather than a gloomy feeling.

Use present tense 'makes' instead of past 'made' to match the general statement about current reactions (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). Replace 'a sort of, of a positive energy' with 'a kind of positive energy' for natural phrasing and remove filler words. Use 'a gloomy feeling' with an article to be grammatically correct (Article error, ID 22).