Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify your preference in a single clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and grammatical errors, and use linking words to contrast the two situations. Be specific with verbs and adjectives (e.g., “lifts me up,” “calms me down”). Keep responses concise (1–3 sentences).

예시: I choose the type of music based on my mood. For example, happy music lifts me up and energizes me when I’m cheerful, while relaxing or sad music calms me down when I’m tired or stressed.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give one clear reason and a short example. Fix verb forms and collocations (e.g., “lifts my mood,” “play upbeat songs,” “the atmosphere becomes”). Avoid trailing off; finish your sentences. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

예시: Yes, it does, because upbeat music lifts my mood and boosts my energy. For example, at parties when they play upbeat songs, the whole atmosphere becomes more exciting and I feel motivated to dance.

× It depends when I'm feeling cheerful or energetic, uh, happy music, it's really a live my, uh, me up and but when I'm tired or just stressed, I was relaxing music.

✓ It depends. When I'm feeling cheerful or energetic, I prefer happy music because it really lifts me up; but when I'm tired or stressed, I prefer relaxing music.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems (ID 26): run-on clauses, missing verbs, and incorrect word order ('a live my', 'I was relaxing music'). Break into clear sentences and use correct verb forms and word order. Use 'lifts me up' (phrasal verb) instead of 'live my up', and parallel structure 'I prefer happy music... I prefer relaxing music'. Also replace 'when I'm tired or just stressed' to match present preference.

× Definitely yes. Upbeat music usually helps live my mood and makes me feel more energetic.

✓ Definitely. Upbeat music usually helps lift my mood and makes me feel more energetic.

This is a present tense usage problem (ID 6) plus incorrect verb form 'live' instead of 'lift'. Use present simple 'helps lift' to describe habitual effects. Correct verb 'lift' is needed, and 'definitely' as a single-word response is more natural.

× For example, when I go to party and they play up a bit songs, the whole atmosphere become more exciting, I feel more motivated to dance and.

✓ For example, when I go to a party and they play upbeat songs, the whole atmosphere becomes more exciting, and I feel more motivated to dance.

There are several errors: missing article 'a' before 'party' (ID 22 Article errors), wrong word order 'play up a bit songs' and incorrect adjective 'upbeat' fits (ID 18 order of adjectives), subject-verb agreement 'atmosphere becomes' (ID 27), and sentence fragment ending with 'and.' Combine clauses properly and use plural 'songs' with 'play'. Replace 'up a bit songs' with 'upbeat songs' for idiomatic expression.