Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary fillers. Use correct verb forms and singular/plural consistency.

예시: I prefer happy music. Firstly, it puts me in a good mood and helps me relax, especially after a stressful day. Secondly, when I walk outside, upbeat songs lift my spirits and improve my mental health.

제안: Answer directly, reduce fillers, and use clearer linking words. Give one clear reason and a short example. Use correct noun forms and article usage, and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, it does. Happy music gives me more energy and makes me feel motivated. For example, when I listen to upbeat songs while studying or exercising, I can concentrate better and work harder.

× I prefer the happy music because it move it get it puts me good mood and helps me relax and happy music is changes our mindset when we was walking or walking in outside it useful for our mental health.

✓ I prefer happy music because it moves me, puts me in a good mood, helps me relax, and changes our mindset when we are walking outside; it is useful for our mental health.

Multiple article and article-like issues: 'the happy music' should be 'happy music' (general preference uses no article). Also many verb and agreement errors exist (see other entries) but here focus is on article use: remove unnecessary 'the' before uncountable/general noun 'happy music'. Additionally add appropriate preposition 'in a good mood' and punctuation to clarify clauses. Suggestion: omit 'the' for general categories, use 'in a good mood' for correct collocation, and separate clauses with commas or conjunctions.

× I prefer the happy music because it move it get it puts me good mood and helps me relax and happy music is changes our mindset when we was walking or walking in outside it useful for our mental health.

✓ I prefer happy music because it moves me, puts me in a good mood, helps me relax, and changes our mindset when we are walking outside; it is useful for our mental health.

Several subject-verb agreement errors: 'it move' should be 'it moves' because singular subject 'it' requires the -s form in present simple. 'happy music is changes' is incorrect: use 'changes' (not 'is changes'). 'we was' should be 'we were' for past, but here context requires present continuous 'we are walking' so use 'are'. Suggestion: ensure verbs match their subjects and tense; for third person singular add -s, and do not combine auxiliary 'is' with a simple present verb.

× Yes, it does, uh, because I like the happy musics and it gives a more energy, uh, after that I feel motivated and I can do any, uh, hard works with happy musics because it's useful.

✓ Yes, it does, because I like happy music and it gives me more energy; after that I feel motivated and I can do hard work with happy music because it's useful.

'musics' is incorrect plural; 'music' is uncountable so do not add -s. 'it gives a more energy' is wrong: use 'gives me more energy' and omit 'a'. Third person singular 'gives' is correct but must include the object 'me'. 'hard works' should be 'hard work' (uncountable) or 'hard tasks'. Suggestion: use uncountable nouns correctly and include appropriate objects with verbs.

× I prefer the happy music because it move it get it puts me good mood and helps me relax and happy music is changes our mindset when we was walking or walking in outside it useful for our mental health.

✓ I prefer happy music because it moves me, puts me in a good mood, helps me relax, and changes our mindset when we are walking outside; it is useful for our mental health.

Preposition errors: 'puts me good mood' should be 'puts me in a good mood' (correct collocation). 'walking in outside' is incorrect; use 'walking outside' or 'walking outdoors'. Suggestion: learn common verb+preposition collocations ('put in a mood', 'walking outside').

× I prefer the happy music because it move it get it puts me good mood and helps me relax and happy music is changes our mindset when we was walking or walking in outside it useful for our mental health.

✓ I prefer happy music because it moves me, puts me in a good mood, helps me relax, and changes our mindset when we are walking outside; it is useful for our mental health.

Pronoun misuse: phrases like 'it move it get it puts me' include redundant 'it' pronouns that are unnecessary and confusing. Remove extra pronouns and keep only the necessary subject pronoun 'it' once for each clause. Suggestion: avoid repeating pronouns; structure clauses so each verb has a clear subject.

× Yes, it does, uh, because I like the happy musics and it gives a more energy, uh, after that I feel motivated and I can do any, uh, hard works with happy musics because it's useful.

✓ Yes, it does, because I like happy music and it gives me more energy; after that I feel motivated and I can do hard work with happy music because it's useful.

Agreement and countability issues: 'hard works' is not correct — 'work' is uncountable or use 'hard tasks' if countable. 'musics' is incorrect plural; 'music' is uncountable. Ensure subject-verb agreement for singular subjects (already 'gives' is correct) and use correct noun forms. Suggestion: use 'work' for general tasks and avoid pluralizing uncountable nouns.