Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar, start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations ("uh") and unclear phrases like "sad stories." Use linking words for coherence (e.g., "because," "for instance"). Also correct subject-verb agreement and pluralization (e.g., "sad music is" not "are").

예시: I prefer sad music because it feels more emotional and melodic. For instance, I often listen to Jay Chou’s melancholic songs because their thoughtful lyrics help me reflect and feel understood after a long, stressful day.

제안: Begin with a direct topic sentence and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "boosts my energy" instead of "live my mood"). Keep answers to maximum five sentences and use a linking word like "for example" correctly. Fix collocation errors ("lift my mood" not "live my mood").

예시: Yes. Happy music usually boosts my energy and lifts my mood. For example, after a long study session I play upbeat tracks to feel more energetic and motivated to continue working.

× Personally, I prefer the sad music because they are more emotional and melodious.

✓ Personally, I prefer sad music because it is more emotional and melodious.

The noun phrase 'the sad music' is uncountable/general so use 'sad music' without 'the'. 'Music' is uncountable and takes singular agreement, so 'they are' is incorrect; use 'it is'. Suggestion: drop 'the' and match verb to singular/uncoordinated uncountable nouns.

× For example, I often listen to the sad stories, the sad music from Jay Chou and they're often uh with thoughtful lyrics and it often helped me reflect and feel understood after a long day.

✓ For example, I often listen to sad stories and sad music from Jay Chou; they often have thoughtful lyrics and they often help me reflect and feel understood after a long day.

Multiple issues: unnecessary article 'the' before plural general nouns ('the sad stories' -> 'sad stories'); incorrect phrase 'they're often uh with thoughtful lyrics' should be 'they often have thoughtful lyrics' using correct verb and preposition; tense inconsistency 'it often helped' should be present 'they often help' to match habitual action. Suggestions: remove unnecessary 'the', use 'have' for lyrics, keep present simple for habits, and ensure pronoun agrees with plural 'they'.

× For example, I often listen to the sad stories, the sad music from Jay Chou and they're often uh with thoughtful lyrics and it often helped me reflect and feel understood after a long day.

✓ For example, I often listen to sad stories and sad music from Jay Chou; they often have thoughtful lyrics and they often help me reflect and feel understood after a long day.

The clause 'it often helped me' used singular past tense 'helped' is wrong because the subject is plural 'they' and the action is habitual. Use third person plural present 'they often help'. Also ensure subject-pronoun agreement: 'they' matches plural 'stories and music' (treated collectively). Suggestion: use consistent present simple for routines and match plural subject with plural verb.

× For example, after a long study or work session, I often put on upbeat songs to live my mood and help me feel inspired.

✓ For example, after a long study or work session, I often put on upbeat songs to lift my mood and help me feel inspired.

The verb 'live' is incorrect here; the intended verb is 'lift' meaning improve. 'Lift' is a base verb, not present participle. Use 'to lift my mood' (infinitive) to express purpose. Suggestion: choose correct verb 'lift' and keep infinitive form after 'to'.

× For example, after a long study or work session, I often put on upbeat songs to live my mood and help me feel inspired.

✓ For example, after a long study or work session, I often put on upbeat songs to lift my mood and help me feel inspired.

Also note preposition usage: 'after a long study or work session' is slightly awkward; better is 'after a long study session or work session' or 'after long study or work sessions'. Suggestion: rephrase for clarity and use 'lift' instead of 'live'.