Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, pronunciation and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and plural nouns, and avoid filler sounds. Add one specific example to make the answer more vivid and keep it under five sentences. Use linking words (e.g., "but", "also") to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer different kinds of music depending on my mood. When I feel happy, I usually listen to upbeat pop songs to keep my energy up, but when I'm sad I choose slow ballads because their lyrics help me reflect and feel better.

제안: Remove excessive fillers and address the question fully. Give a clear direct response, then provide two brief specific situations where happy music helps you, linked with words like "especially" or "for example". Finish the sentence and avoid trailing off.

예시: Yes, absolutely. Happy music boosts my energy and motivation, especially when I exercise or need to concentrate while studying; for example, I listen to fast-tempo tracks during my morning run and upbeat instrumental playlists when I revise for exams.

× It depend on my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

The subject 'It' requires the third-person singular present tense form of the verb. 'depend' is base form; add -s to make 'depends'. Suggestion: use 'depends' for he/she/it in simple present (It depends on ...).

× I like to listen to sad song.

✓ I like to listen to sad songs.

The noun 'song' is countable and refers to songs in general, so it needs plural form 'songs' or an article ('a sad song') if singular. Because context contrasts types of music in general, plural 'songs' is appropriate. Suggestion: use plural for general statements about countable nouns (sad songs).

× Yes, Sir sure, I feel more excited when I listen to happy music, especially when I need the motivation uh, uh, and uh, when I do exercise or, uh study, umm, but uh, sometimes when I'm.

✓ Yes, sir. Sure — I feel more excited when I listen to happy music, especially when I need motivation, for example when I exercise or study. Sometimes, when I'm ... (continue thought).

This utterance is a run-on fragment with fillers and an incomplete ending. It also has unnecessary capitalization 'Sir' in mid-sentence and wordiness ('the motivation' → 'motivation'). To make it grammatical: split into sentences, remove filler sounds ('uh', 'umm'), use 'motivation' without 'the' in this context, and complete the final clause or remove it. Suggestion: reorganize into clear sentences and finish thoughts; avoid filler words in formal responses.