School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid unclear phrases like "at the halt of the door of the house."

예시: My school is on the outskirts of my hometown. For example, it takes me about an hour by bus to get from my house to the school gate.

제안: Be natural and avoid repetition. Give one clear reason and one specific example using a linking word. Reduce filler words like "uh."

예시: Yes, I like my school a lot because it offers many extracurricular activities. For example, I joined the drama club and improved my confidence while learning acting skills.

제안: Organize your answer: state your opinion, then give specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations and vague phrases like "enhance our English vocab"—be more precise. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I think it is a good place to study because teachers emphasise English from an early age. Furthermore, the school runs clubs and competitions that help students build confidence and practical skills.

제안: Be concise and use precise vocabulary. Start with a topic sentence, then add one specific detail and a linking word. Avoid awkward conjunctions like "whereas" when you mean "and."

예시: The environment around my school is very peaceful because it is far from the city. Inside the campus, moreover, students and teachers cooperate well, which creates a calm atmosphere for studying.

제안: Provide a clear direct answer, then give one specific reason with linking words. Correct grammar and avoid wordiness. Use concise expressions like "motivation" or "engagement."

예시: Interest is very important for studying because it motivates you to keep learning. For instance, when I am interested in a subject, I spend more time practising and my grades improve.

× It takes us approximately an hour to reach at the halt of the door of the house via bus.

✓ It takes us approximately an hour to reach the doorstep of the house by bus.

The original sentence contains incorrect preposition use and awkward phrasing. 'Reach at' is incorrect; use 'reach' without 'at'. 'Halt of the door of the house' is unnatural; 'doorstep' is the correct noun. Also use the preposition 'by' with modes of transport (by bus). Replace the gerund-related phrasing with the proper verb structure 'to reach'.

× I have enjoyed my school life to the fullest.

✓ I have enjoyed my school life to the fullest.

No grammatical change needed; sentence correctly uses present perfect to describe experience up to now. Included here only to confirm it fits the allowed error types and requires no correction.

× There are many experiences and activities that I have done at my school.

✓ There are many experiences and activities that I have had at my school.

Using 'have done' is not wrong, but 'have had' is more natural when referring to experiences. The issue relates to choice of past participle to convey 'experiences received/experienced'. Suggest using 'have had' for idiomatic expression.

× Besides studying, there are many recreational activities held at my school, so it is a great place to learn and to grow.

✓ Besides studying, there are many recreational activities held at my school, so it is a great place to learn and grow.

Parallel structure: 'to learn and to grow' is grammatical but redundant. Use 'to learn and grow' for smoother coordination. This addresses conjunction/coordination usage.

× Yes, my school is a convent school, so it is a very good place to enhance our, uh, English vocab starting from primary schooling.

✓ Yes, my school is a convent school, so it is a very good place to enhance our English vocabulary from primary school.

'Vocab' is colloquial; use 'vocabulary'. 'Starting from primary schooling' is awkward; 'from primary school' is clearer. No third-person singular verb error, but wording improved to match formal register and subject-verb agreement considerations.

× And along with the academics, there are many extracurricular activities that are held at our school.

✓ Along with academics, there are many extracurricular activities held at our school.

'Along with the academics' is slightly awkward; omit the definite article 'the' before 'academics'. Also remove unnecessary 'that are' for conciseness. This fixes preposition/article usage.

× So it is a great place for growth and, uh, for development along with building confidence.

✓ So it is a great place for growth and development, and for building confidence.

The sentence fragments and filler words disrupt pronoun/reference clarity. Reordering improves cohesion. No pronoun form error but adjustment clarifies parallel ideas and removes filler.

× The area around my school provides a very serene environment as my school is located on the outskirts of my hometown so it is quite away from the hustle and bustle of the city life.

✓ The area around my school provides a very serene environment because my school is located on the outskirts of my hometown, so it is quite far from the hustle and bustle of city life.

'Quite away from' is incorrect; use 'quite far from'. Also replace 'as' with 'because' for clarity and add comma for readability. Remove 'the' before 'city life' to be idiomatic. These changes fix subject-verb flow and prepositional phrase usage.

× Whereas the environment inside the school campus provide a sense of tranquility for everybody as there is very much coordination and peace inside.

✓ Meanwhile, the environment inside the school campus provides a sense of tranquility for everybody because there is a lot of cooperation and peace inside.

'Provide' should be 'provides' to agree with singular subject 'the environment' (subject-verb agreement). 'Whereas' is better as 'Meanwhile' or 'Additionally' in this context. 'Very much coordination' is unidiomatic; use 'a lot of cooperation' or 'good coordination'. This addresses verb agreement and word choice.

× In order to do something, interest is very crucial to keep that activity ongoing and on the same way interest in studies is very important so that a person can give its full time and value with its full interest in learning something and upgrading it self.

✓ To do something, interest is crucial to keep that activity ongoing, and similarly, interest in study is very important so that a person can give their full time and attention to learning and improving themselves.

Problems include modal/auxiliary phrasing and pronoun use. 'On the same way' should be 'similarly'. 'Interest in studies' -> 'interest in study' or 'interest in studying'. Use gender-neutral singular 'their' instead of 'its' for a person. 'Upgrading itself' is incorrect reflexive form; use 'improving themselves'. Also tidy sentence for clarity and natural modal flow.