Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "Yes, I did") then add one or two brief supporting details. Use past tense consistently and avoid redundancy. For example, say when you had it and a short comment about how you used it.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle from about age seven and I rode it to visit friends and explore my neighborhood every weekend.

제안: Organize your answer into a clear opinion sentence followed by specific reasons and use correct tense and linking words. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Mention trends or evidence (e.g. pandemic effect, cycling lanes) and connect ideas with linking words like "because", "for example" or "however".

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people started cycling during the pandemic for exercise and to avoid public transport. For example, cities added more bike lanes and sales of bikes increased, so cycling is now more common than before.

× Yes, I have it back when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child.

The original sentence mixes present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was a child.' Use past tense 'had' for actions or possessions in the past. Also 'it' is unclear for 'a bike'; use 'one' or 'a bike' to refer clearly to the object. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time reference and use a clear noun or 'one' instead of 'it.'

× They are somewhat It's very popular, but during the pandemic it reaches its peak. The overall Papa popularness.

✓ They are somewhat popular; in general they are very popular, and they reached their peak during the pandemic.

The original contains mixed fragments and tense errors. 'They are somewhat It's very popular' is a run-on and inconsistent. Use a single cohesive sentence: 'They are somewhat popular; in general they are very popular.' 'It reaches its peak' uses present tense 'reaches' for a past event; change to past tense 'reached.' 'The overall Papa popularness' is ungrammatical and unclear—replace with 'in general they are very popular' or 'overall popularity.' Suggestion: combine related ideas into clear sentences, maintain consistent tense for past events, and use correct noun phrases ('popularity' rather than 'popularness').

× They are somewhat popular; in general they are very popular, and they reached their peak during the pandemic.

✓ Bicycles are somewhat popular; in general they are very popular, and they reached their peak during the pandemic.

Using 'they' without a clear antecedent can be ambiguous. Although context implies 'bikes,' explicitly naming the noun ('bicycles' or 'bikes') improves clarity. Suggestion: use the specific noun at least once before relying on pronouns, especially at the start of an answer.