Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, correct key vocabulary (bike, back -> bike; write -> ride), avoid repeating the examiner's question, and provide 1–2 supporting details using linking words. Also correct tense and word choice (e.g. 'supported me' -> 'helped me'). Try to keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father helped me learn to ride at first, and little by little I became confident cycling on my own. I enjoyed riding to the park with friends on weekends.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then provide specific reasons with linking words. Fix repetition and gaps, and use precise vocabulary (e.g. 'popular', 'common', 'convenient', 'environmentally friendly'). Avoid hesitations and unclear fragments. Keep to 2–3 sentences and include one concrete example or reason.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in Japan. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips because they are convenient and affordable, and most cities have bike lanes and parking areas which makes cycling safe.

× Yes, I had a back when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used 'back' instead of the correct noun 'bike'. This is a word choice/typo error rather than a tense problem; however the sentence context requires past tense which is correctly used with 'had'. Suggestion: replace incorrect word with 'bike' and proofread for typos.

× My father told me to write and supported me at the beginning and little by little I learned to write.

✓ My father taught me to ride and supported me at the beginning, and little by little I learned to ride.

The student used 'write' twice where the intended verb is 'ride' (learning to ride a bike). This is a lexical error causing wrong meaning and poor sentence structure. Also the sentence needs a conjunction and a comma before 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: use the correct verb 'ride' and add a comma: '..., and little by little...'.

× Yes, I think the bike bikes are popular in my country because the *** Japan.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because I live in Japan.

The sentence has repetition 'the bike bikes' and a fragment 'the *** Japan'. The student should use the plural noun 'bikes' without 'the' for general statements and provide a clear reason. Present simple 'think' and 'are' are correct for general facts. Suggestion: remove duplication and fix the clause to 'because I live in Japan'.

× I live in Japan and Japanese a load is fairly uh.

✓ I live in Japan and bicycles are fairly common here.

This fragment is ungrammatical: 'Japanese a load is fairly uh' is not a valid structure. The intended meaning seems to be that bicycles are common in Japan. Use a subject 'bicycles' and the adjective phrase 'fairly common' with the auxiliary 'are'. Suggestion: replace the garbled phrase with 'bicycles are fairly common here' and avoid filler words like 'uh'.