Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and use correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence (past simple), avoid filler words, and include one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix subject-verb agreement and pronouns.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was bright yellow and my father gave it to me as a birthday present, so I treasured it. I often shared it with my younger brother, and we used to ride together around our neighborhood every weekend.

제안: Answer directly, use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles), and give specific reasons with linking words. State your opinion, then add two clear supporting points and a brief example.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my city. Firstly, many people use them for short trips because cycling is cheap and efficient. Secondly, cycling is good for health, so my family often rides together on weekends to stay fit.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and color of my bike was uh, yellow, and I like my bike because it was the gift for me from my father.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and the color of my bike was yellow, and I liked my bike because it was a gift to me from my father.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses. 'Have' and 'like' should be past tense to match the time reference 'when I was a child.' Use 'had' and 'liked.' Also add the definite article 'the' before 'color' and remove unnecessary filler words. Use 'a gift to me' or 'a gift from my father' for natural phrasing.

× I have a bike when I was a child and color of my bike was uh, yellow, and I like my bike because it was the gift for me from my father.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and the color of my bike was yellow, and I liked my bike because it was a gift from my father.

Missing articles: 'the color' needs 'the.' 'The gift for me' is awkward; use 'a gift from my father.' Articles are required to make noun phrases grammatical and natural.

× Uh, I sharing my bike with my brother and it together cycling this bike.

✓ I shared my bike with my brother, and we rode it together.

Pronouns and verb forms are incorrect. 'I sharing' should be past tense 'I shared.' 'It together cycling this bike' is ungrammatical; use 'we rode it together' to clearly express joint action and match past tense.

× Yes, bikes is also popular in my city because there are many bikes in my neighbors and because the bikes are healthy.

✓ Yes, bikes are also popular in my city because there are many bikes in my neighborhoods and because biking is healthy.

Subject-verb agreement: 'bikes is' should be 'bikes are.' 'My neighbors' is incorrect for 'neighborhoods.' Also 'the bikes are healthy' is unnatural—biking/activity is healthy, so use 'biking is healthy.'

× ...there are many bikes in my neighbors...

✓ ...there are many bikes in my neighborhood...

Using 'in my neighbors' is incorrect because 'neighbors' are people. The correct prepositional phrase is 'in my neighborhood' to mean the area where you live.

× People used to be healthier and me and my family always use the bike.

✓ People tend to be healthier, and my family and I always use bikes.

'Used to be healthier' implies a past habit—here the intended meaning is general tendency, so use 'tend to be healthier.' 'Me and my family' is nonstandard order; use 'my family and I.' Verb tense/number: 'use the bike' should be plural/general 'use bikes' or 'use the bike' with article consistency.

× The bikes are.

✓ (Remove this fragment)

'The bikes are.' is a sentence fragment lacking a complement (e.g., 'The bikes are convenient'). Remove the fragment or complete it with appropriate information to form a full sentence.