Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on grammatical accuracy, reduce hesitations, and make answers more coherent and specific. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g. "when I was at secondary school," "a gift from my parents," "excited about it" → "I was excited") and correct verbs for cycling ("ride," not "write"). Remove filler sounds ("uh") and keep answer within 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small bicycle when I was at secondary school; it was a gift from my parents for my birthday. I was very excited because I could ride to school and visit friends more easily. Although learning was difficult at first, after a few days of practice I could ride confidently.

제안: Improve sentence structure and use precise vocabulary. Start with a direct statement, then add a specific reason and an example. Correct plural and agreement errors ("Vietnam, which is a developing country," "bikes and motorbikes are common"). Avoid fillers and be concise. Use linking words such as "because" or "however" to connect ideas and provide a clear comparison between bicycles and motorbikes if relevant.

예시: Yes, bikes are still popular in Vietnam, but motorbikes are more widespread because they are affordable and convenient for daily commuting. For example, many people use motorbikes to travel to work and markets, while bicycles are more common among students and in smaller towns.

× I had a small bicycle when I was a secondary school.

✓ I had a small bicycle when I was in secondary school.

The phrase 'when I was a secondary school' is ungrammatical because 'secondary school' is a place or stage, not a role; you need the preposition 'in' to indicate being at school. Use 'in secondary school' to show the time period. Suggestion: say 'when I was in secondary school' or 'when I was in high school.'

× It was a gift for my parents on my birth date, uh, and I really, uh, excited about it.

✓ It was a gift from my parents for my birthday, and I was really excited about it.

Several issues: 'a gift for my parents' implies the parents received the gift; the intended meaning is the parents gave the gift, so use 'from my parents.' 'On my birth date' is unnatural — use 'for my birthday.' The clause 'I really, uh, excited about it' lacks the verb 'was' and needs past tense. Suggestion: use 'I was really excited about it.'

× At first I found it quite, uh, difficult to write, but after practicing for a few days is I were able to write quite well.

✓ At first I found it quite difficult to ride, but after practicing for a few days I was able to ride quite well.

Multiple errors: likely wrong verb 'write' should be 'ride' (cycling). The clause 'after practicing for a few days is I were able' has extraneous 'is' and incorrect subject-verb agreement 'I were'; use past simple 'I was able.' Also 'practicing' is fine as a gerund after 'after.' Suggestion: 'after practicing for a few days, I was able to ride quite well.'

× Yes, I live in Vietnam, which is the developing countries and buys motorized uh are very common uh because it is affordable and practical uh for getting uh around.

✓ Yes, I live in Vietnam, which is a developing country, and motorized bikes are very common because they are affordable and practical for getting around.

Several agreement and word-choice errors: 'the developing countries' disagrees with singular 'Vietnam' — use 'a developing country.' 'buys motorized' is incorrect; likely intended 'motorized bikes' or 'motorbikes.' Subject-verb agreement: 'motorized bikes are very common' (plural subject 'bikes' with 'are'). Pronoun agreement: 'it is affordable' should be 'they are affordable' referring to bikes. Also remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary words. Suggestion: 'motorized bikes are very common because they are affordable and practical for getting around.'