Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid irrelevant words (e.g. 'flamboyant') and grammar mistakes (use past tense consistently). Use linking words to connect ideas and vary vocabulary (e.g. 'couldn't afford', 'I envied', 'I wished'). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford one. I often watched other children riding around the neighborhood, and I envied them because I wanted the freedom to explore. As a result, I usually walked or shared a friend's bike when possible.

제안: Clarify and organize ideas with correct vocabulary and grammar. Start with a direct statement, then give specific examples (e.g. types of bikes, who uses them, why). Use linking words (e.g. 'for example', 'because', 'also') and correct verbs/articles. Avoid unclear phrases and keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in Nigeria, especially as an affordable way to travel. For example, many people use motorbike taxis to get to work because they are cheaper and faster than cars in traffic. Also, bicycles are common in rural areas for short trips and carrying goods.

× I didn't have a bike when I was young because my parents were not flamboyant.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was young because my parents were not wealthy.

The word 'flamboyant' describes showy or ostentatious behavior, not financial ability to buy a bicycle. The intended meaning is lack of money, so 'wealthy' or 'well-off' is appropriate. Use vocabulary that matches the intended semantic meaning to avoid confusion.

× They couldn't afford a bicycle for me.

✓ They couldn't afford a bicycle for me.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'Couldn't afford' correctly uses the modal 'could' in the negative to express past inability. No change needed.

× Seeing other children riding bicycle really pleased me and I really wish my parents could afford one.

✓ Seeing other children riding bicycles really pleased me and I really wished my parents could have afforded one.

There are two issues: count noun 'bicycle' should be plural when speaking generally about other children, and tense/mood needs consistency. 'Seeing' as a gerund is fine. Because the speaker refers to a past regret, 'really pleased me' (past) pairs with 'I really wished my parents could have afforded one' to express past unreal condition. Use plural for general reference and correct past unreal/modal perfect for regret.

× Bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country.

This sentence is correct: plural subject 'Bikes' matches plural verb 'are'. No change needed.

× Here in Nigeria, it serves as means of transportation for people who could not afford a car and for people who don't know how to ride.

✓ Here in Nigeria, they serve as a means of transportation for people who cannot afford a car and for people who do not know how to drive.

Pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to plural 'Bikes', so use 'they'. 'Means' requires the article 'a' when followed by singular 'means of transportation'. Tense/modal consistency: use 'cannot' for general truth and 'do not know how to drive' is clearer than 'ride' when referring to cars; if referring to bikes, keep 'ride'. Also keep contractions consistent depending on formality.

× There is bikes and you're actually going to pay and they transport you to where you are going, to which.

✓ There are bikes for hire and you actually pay them and they take you to where you need to go.

'There is' should be 'There are' to agree with plural 'bikes'. 'Bikes for hire' clarifies meaning. 'You're actually going to pay and they transport you' is awkward; use 'you pay them and they take you' for clarity. 'To which' is unnecessary and incorrect here; replace with 'where you need to go.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and natural phrasing.