Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words, and use one or two supporting details linked clearly. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., “20 minutes’ walk” or “a 20-minute walk”). Use a linking phrase to connect reason to action.

예시: Yes, I did. My school was about a 20-minute walk from home, so I usually rode my bike to get there quickly and save time.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence then support it with two specific reasons using linking words. Improve grammar (use plural where needed: “subways” or “the subway”) and use smoother connectors like “because” or “however.” Add a short example or consequence to make it more specific.

예시: Not really. In South Korea, bikes aren’t very popular because bike lanes are limited and many people find public transport, like buses and the subway, faster and more convenient; for example, commuters usually choose the subway during rush hour.

× I had a bike when I was a child. Uh, my school was quite far away from my home so it took 20 minutes by walk, so I usually rode my bike to school.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child. Uh, my school was quite far from my home so it took 20 minutes on foot, so I usually rode my bike to school.

The main verbs are correctly in the past tense, but the phrase 'by walk' is incorrect English usage. Use 'on foot' to describe traveling by walking. Also 'far away from' can be simplified to 'far from' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: replace 'by walk' with 'on foot' and prefer 'far from' for smoother expression.

× I don't think bikes are very popular in my country, South Korea, so the roads for the bicycles are not well prepared and many people prefer to use public transportation such as buses or subway.

✓ I don't think bikes are very popular in my country, South Korea, so bicycle lanes are not well developed and many people prefer to use public transportation such as buses or the subway.

Problems: 'roads for the bicycles' is awkward; 'bicycle lanes' or 'roads for bicycles' is better. 'Not well prepared' is unnatural; use 'not well developed' or 'not well maintained'. Also 'buses or subway' needs an article before 'subway' ('the subway') or plural 'subways' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use 'bicycle lanes are not well developed' and 'buses or the subway' for grammatical and natural expression.