Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: The answer is clear and relevant but a bit long and contains fillers ("uh"). To improve, start with a concise topic sentence, remove hesitations, and add one specific supporting detail (e.g., how you felt or a memory) using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes. I had a small red bicycle with training wheels that my parents gave me for my sixth birthday. I remember practicing every afternoon in the garden, and within a few weeks I could ride without the wheels, which made me feel very proud.

제안: The response answers the question but has multiple hesitations, some grammatical awkwardness, and vague reasons. To improve, state your opinion clearly, use one or two specific reasons linked with words like "because" or "for example," and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "brands," "models," "commuters"). Limit to two or three sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because more manufacturers offer affordable models and cycling is promoted for health and commuting. For example, many people now use bicycles to travel short distances to work or school, especially in cities with bike lanes.

× I think that in my country bicycles are very, uh, famous because, uh, nowadays as there are lot, many new brands that are opening for the bicycles and people are, are having a very wide variety of choosing a bicycle for them.

✓ I think that in my country bicycles are very popular because nowadays many new brands are opening for bicycles and people have a wide variety of bicycles to choose from.

Multiple issues fall under the present participle/verb form and related structure problems. 'Famous' is incorrect collocation for objects like bicycles; 'popular' is the correct adjective. 'As there are lot' is ungrammatical: 'a lot of' or 'many' should be used; here 'many' alone is sufficient. 'Brands that are opening for the bicycles' uses awkward present participle and preposition: use 'brands are opening' or 'new brands are entering the market' and omit 'for the'. 'People are, are having' repeats auxiliary and uses progressive 'are having' unnecessarily; stative verb 'have' is better in simple present. 'A very wide variety of choosing a bicycle for them' misuses 'choosing' (present participle) and preposition; correct structure is 'a wide variety of bicycles to choose from.' Suggestions: use simple present for general truths, choose correct collocations ('popular', 'enter the market'), use 'many' or 'a lot of', and use the pattern 'a variety of X to choose from.'