Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question directly, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitation words (uh, um) and repetition. Use past tense consistently and correct articles (a/an/the).

예시: Yes. I had a small bicycle when I was a child. It was actually a bit too small for me, so I outgrew it quickly and spent more time learning to balance than riding long distances.

제안: Give a direct opinion, then support it with clear, specific reasons or examples. Avoid vague phrases (“too many”, “such as a slender BMW”) and incorrect terms (BMW is a car/brand; be precise about types: road bikes, motorcycles). Use linking words like 'because', 'for example', or 'especially'.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many young people use motorbikes or electric scooters to commute to work or school, and you can see them everywhere during rush hour.

× Well, uh, when I was child, I don't have a bike, uh, as I was a child, but I have a bicycle that was too tiny for me as I was also tiny and I have a bicycle when I was a child.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I didn't have a bike that fit me; I had a bicycle that was too tiny for me.

Errors: missing article before 'child' and mixed tenses and awkward repetition. Use past tense consistently for past situations (didn't have, had). Remove repeated phrases and combine ideas for clarity. Add the article 'a' before 'child'. Use 'didn't have a bike that fit me' rather than present 'don't have' and avoid repeating 'when I was a child' twice.

× Well, yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Well, yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country.

Not strictly wrong, but 'bikes' is informal; 'bicycles' is more appropriate in formal speech. No grammatical number error; suggestion improves register.

× There are too many bikes, such as a slender BMW and so many.

✓ There are many types of bicycles, including slim models and others from brands like BMW.

Original is unclear and ungrammatical: 'such as a slender BMW and so many' is incomplete. Rephrase to list examples clearly and use count noun agreement ('many types of bicycles'). Specify examples rather than vague 'so many.'

× And these bikes are very, uh, popular in my country as among the young people.

✓ These bicycles are very popular among young people in my country.

Incorrect word order and redundant prepositions: 'popular in my country as among the young people' is awkward. Use 'popular among young people in my country.' Remove unnecessary filler 'as' and place 'in my country' after the group for natural order.