Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and pronoun use, and limit to 3–4 concise sentences. Use linking words (for example, then, later, however) and give one specific detail (e.g., age, why you changed bikes). Avoid redundancy and unrelated comments (like current age unless relevant).

예시: Yes. I had a bike from the age of five when my mother bought my first one. Later, in primary school I got a new blue bike because I wanted something faster, and I rode it around my neighborhood every weekend. However, I don't own a bike now.

제안: Make the response more structured and accurate. Begin with a direct opinion, then support it with clear contrasting details using linking words (for example, although, while, especially). Use correct noun forms and avoid filler words. Provide one specific example or brief explanation about where and why bikes or motorbikes are used.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are still popular in Vietnam, especially in rural areas where people use them for short trips and farming tasks. However, in big cities motorbikes are more common because they are faster and handle heavy traffic better.

× When I was 5 my mom bought my first bike and later on when I was in my primary school I was bored, bought a new one that was a blue one.

✓ When I was five, my mom bought my first bike, and later when I was in primary school I got bored and bought a new one that was blue.

The sentence contains inconsistent verb forms and awkward phrasing. Use 'five' (written) and add commas for clarity. Replace the comma splice and omitted subject before 'bought' by using 'I got bored and bought' to form two clear past actions. 'A blue one' should be 'blue' without the extra article 'a' before 'blue'.

× Yes, and until now I'm 26.

✓ Yes, and I am 26 now.

The phrase 'until now I'm 26' mixes a progressive time marker with a simple state. Use the simple present 'I am 26 now' to state current age. Also place 'now' at the end for natural word order.

× I have no bike right here.

✓ I don't have a bike right now.

'I have no bike right here' is understandable but unnatural. Use the negative contraction 'I don't have' and the adverb 'right now' to indicate current possession. 'Right here' refers to location rather than time.

× In Vietnam bike is really popular, especially in some countryside, yes, but and big cities I think that's motorbikes are more popular, yes.

✓ In Vietnam, bikes are really popular, especially in some rural areas, but in big cities I think motorbikes are more popular.

Multiple issues: 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match general statement (subject-verb agreement). 'Some countryside' is awkward; use 'some rural areas' or 'the countryside'. Remove filler words 'yes, but and' and the unnecessary 'that's'. Keep consistent sentence structure: contrast 'but in big cities' and use 'motorbikes are more popular'.