Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak more fluently and reduce fillers (uh, um). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences) and correct small grammar errors (e.g., "pink colour" → "pink").

예시: Yes. I got a pink bike when I was about seven or eight years old. It was my main way of getting to school, and I also used it to visit friends afterwards. Because it was lightweight and easy to ride, I felt very independent and spent a lot of time practicing tricks in the park.

제안: Organise your answer with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific reasons and a brief example. Use linking words (however, because, for example) and correct grammar ("younger one" → "young people"; "people less likely to use it" → "people are less likely to use them"). Avoid fillers and vague phrases.

예시: Yes, bikes are still popular, especially among children and young people, because they are inexpensive and good exercise. However, in recent years fewer adults cycle regularly because of the rise of cars, public transport and delivery apps. For example, many families now prefer cars for longer trips, so cycling is more often a recreational activity than a daily commute.

× I remember that, uh, I got a bike when I was in school around 7 to 8 years.

✓ I remember that I got a bike when I was in school, around 7 or 8 years old.

Use of 'around 7 to 8 years' is unidiomatic for age; include 'old' and use '7 or 8' instead of '7 to 8'. Also remove filler 'uh' and add comma for clarity. Keep past tense 'got' to match 'remember'.

× It was, uh, pink colour and I really enjoyed riding that bike when I was going to school.

✓ It was pink in color, and I really enjoyed riding that bike when I went to school.

English requires either 'pink in color' or 'pink' alone; 'pink colour' is incorrect. Also use simple past 'went' (not 'was going') to match habitual past action. Remove filler 'uh' and add conjunction punctuation.

× I was playing after coming to school.

✓ I used to play after coming home from school.

Original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. Likely meaning: playing after arriving home from school. Use 'used to' for habitual past, and 'home from school' clarifies location. Alternatively: 'I played after I came home from school.'

× Yes, absolutely bikes are true uh, much in use by children and also the younger one to stay fit, but uh, nowadays due to the technology advancement, uh, people less likely to use it.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Bikes are very popular with children and young people for staying fit, but nowadays, because of technological advancement, people are less likely to use them.

Multiple issues: plural 'bikes' needs proper sentence punctuation; 'the younger one' should be 'young people' or 'younger people'; 'much in use' is unnatural — use 'very popular' or 'widely used'; 'the technology advancement' should be 'technological advancement' or 'advances in technology'; verb phrase 'people less likely to use it' requires 'are less likely to use them' to match plural 'bikes' and include auxiliary 'are'. Corrections follow standard subject-verb agreement and noun phrase usage.