Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, reduce hesitations, and make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and passive/active phrasing, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid filler sounds like “uh.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My uncle gave it to me for my tenth birthday, and I remember riding it around the neighborhood every afternoon. Because of that gift, I learned to ride confidently and made many friends.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and examples. Fix word-choice and fluency issues (e.g., ‘prefer to ride a bike’). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid trailing off. Keep it within 1–3 sentences for Part 1.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my city because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, there are dedicated bike lanes and affordable rental schemes, so cycling is convenient and saves time during rush hours.

× Yes, uh, I had a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, uh, I had a bike when I was a child.

The noun 'child' needs the definite article 'a' in this singular countable context. Use 'a child' to indicate being one member of the category. Suggestion: include appropriate articles before singular countable nouns (a/an/the).

× It uh, gave me by my uncle on my birthday and I was uh, very happy to get it as a gift.

✓ It was given to me by my uncle on my birthday, and I was very happy to get it as a gift.

The original sentence misuses word order and verbs: 'gave me by my uncle' is incorrect. Use the passive form 'was given to me by' or active 'my uncle gave it to me'. Also include the auxiliary 'was' and correct preposition 'to'. Suggestion: use passive voice correctly for receiving actions ('was given to me by...') or active voice with correct object placement ('my uncle gave it to me').

× Personally, I. Prefer to to Rd. a bike in my country exactly in my city because it helped me to to.

✓ Personally, I prefer to ride a bike in my country, especially in my city, because it helps me to get around.

Multiple issues: a stray period after 'I' breaks sentence structure; 'Prefer' should not be capitalized mid-sentence; 'to to Rd. a bike' contains duplicated 'to', an abbreviation 'Rd.' and wrong verb form—use 'ride' after 'to'; 'exactly in my city' is awkward—use 'especially in my city'; tense consistency: 'helped me to' should be present 'helps me to' when stating a general preference. Suggestion: remove incorrect punctuation, use infinitive 'to ride', choose clearer adverb ('especially'), and maintain present tense for habitual actions.