Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and directly answers the question, but it is very short and could be improved by adding one or two specific supporting details and a linking word to make it more natural and informative. For example, briefly mention when you got it, how often you rode it, or a short memory to enrich the response. Keep the total to no more than five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did have a bike when I was younger. I got it when I was about seven and rode it to school and to my friends’ houses almost every day. Because there weren’t many cars in my neighborhood, cycling was the most common way for kids to get around.

제안: Good content and reasons are provided, but the answer can be made more natural by using smoother linking words and more precise vocabulary. Avoid repetition (e.g. "everyone in each house") and tighten sentences. Add a short example or contrast to support your point and keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because cars are expensive. As a result, most families own at least one bicycle for daily travel. For example, in my hometown people often cycle to the market or work instead of driving, especially for short trips.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was younger.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was younger.

The original sentence uses 'did have' which is an unnecessary emphatic form in a simple past context. Use simple past 'had' to answer a yes/no question about the past. Suggestion: use 'I had' for a natural, concise past-tense response.

× Almost everyone in each house owns one bike and it is because cars are very expensive back in my hometown and so people prefer to use bikes.

✓ Almost everyone in each house owns a bike because cars are very expensive in my hometown, so people prefer to use bikes.

Several issues addressed: 'one bike' is acceptable but 'a bike' is more natural with 'owns'; 'it is because' is wordy and awkward—combine into a single clause using 'because'; 'back in my hometown' mixes past marker 'back' with a general statement—use 'in my hometown'; also run-on sentence fixed by replacing 'and so' with ', so'. Suggestion: simplify clauses, use 'a bike' and 'because' for clearer causal structure.