Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, avoid filler words (uh, you know) and correct grammar (tense and number agreement). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, replace repetitive phrases and fix tense: "We were a family of seven, and my parents couldn't afford a bike." Also avoid over-explaining irrelevant numbers; focus on the main reason and perhaps a brief consequence.

예시: No, I didn't. My family was quite poor when I was a child, and with seven people to support my parents couldn't afford to buy a bicycle. As a result, I usually walked to school or took public transport.

제안: Improve grammar, use correct subject-verb agreement and remove repetitions. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore, so) and finish the sentence. For instance, say "Yes, cycling is very popular in China because of heavy traffic in cities, so many people use bikes for short commutes." Add one brief supporting detail about e-bikes or bike-sharing to enrich your answer.

예시: Yes, cycling is very popular in China because of the large population and heavy city traffic, so many people choose bikes for short commutes. For example, bike-sharing services and electric bicycles have become common for quick trips to work or the market.

× We have, we had uh, like 7 people to feed for five of us, uh, were kids and so we couldn't afford to buy.

✓ We had, uh, like seven people to feed; five of us were kids, so we couldn't afford to buy one.

The student mixes present and past tenses ('have' with 'had') in a context clearly about childhood (past). Maintain past tense throughout. Also replace numeral '7' with 'seven' in formal speech and add punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (use past for past situations) and use clear clause boundaries.

× Yes, it is biking are very popular in our country because there was there is large population in China and and the traffic is very heavy in most cities, cities and during commuting, commuting time, so people choose to.

✓ Yes, biking is very popular in our country because there is a large population in China and traffic is very heavy in most cities during commuting time, so people choose to cycle.

The original contains subject-verb disagreement ('biking are' should be singular 'biking is') and mixes tenses ('was there is'). Also redundant words ('and and', repeated 'cities', repeated 'commuting'). Ensure singular subject matches singular verb and maintain present tense when stating general facts. Suggestion: use 'is' for general statements, remove repetitions, and finish the sentence with a clear verb ('choose to cycle').