Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on grammatical accuracy, conciseness and clear timeline. Start with a direct topic sentence (simple past) and then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (don't repeat the same time twice) and correct verb forms and articles.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for my fifth birthday, and I rode it regularly from age five until I was twelve. It was a red bicycle with a basket, which I used to visit friends and learn tricks, so I have fond memories of it.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, then support it with two specific, well-linked reasons. Use appropriate linking words (because, for example, moreover) and correct nouns and verb forms. Be concise and avoid vague phrasing like 'like' and repetition.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for commuting and for exercise. For example, students and workers often cycle to school or work to save money and avoid traffic, and others rent or buy stationary exercise bikes to stay fit.

× 'I do had a bike when I had when I was child.'

✓ 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

'do had' is incorrect because 'do' is not used with past main verbs. The sentence also repeats 'when' and omits the article 'a' before "child". Use simple past 'had' for a past state: "I had a bike when I was a child." Avoid unnecessary repetition.'

× 'My father bought it for me on my 5th birthday and I have been getting it since my 5th birthday to my 12th birthday.'

✓ 'My father bought it for me on my fifth birthday and I had it from my fifth birthday until my twelfth birthday.'

'have been getting' is incorrect because it suggests an ongoing receiving process; the intended meaning is possession over a past period. Use simple past 'had' or 'had it from...until...' to indicate possession during a finished time span. Also use 'fifth' and 'twelfth' in words for naturalness.'

× 'So that's been really useful for me and I really love that bike.'

✓ 'So it was really useful to me and I really loved that bike.'

'that's been' (present perfect) and 'I really love' (present) conflict with the past context about childhood. To keep tense consistent, use past tense: 'it was really useful' and 'I really loved that bike.' If you mean you still love it now, keep present for 'love' but clarify the time frame.'

× 'Yes I have a strong belief that bikes are really popular in my country cause the children's and some adults do use bikes for the physical health and also to go to their respective works and many people use their bikes for like doing cardio and they have a home bike also and there are different type of bikes.'

✓ 'Yes, I strongly believe that bikes are very popular in my country because children and some adults use bikes for physical health and to get to work. Many people also use exercise bikes at home, and there are different types of bikes.'

'the children's' is incorrect plural noun use with a definite article and apostrophe; use 'children'. 'their respective works' is awkward; use 'to get to work'. 'doing cardio' is informal; 'exercise' or 'cardio' is fine but rephrase. 'there are different type of bikes' should be 'different types of bikes' (plural). Also add commas and 'because' instead of 'cause' for formality.'

× '...to go to their respective works'

✓ '...to get to work'

'go to their respective works' is unidiomatic. In English we say 'get to work' or 'go to work' for commuting. 'Respective' is unnecessary and awkward here.'},{