Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense (e.g., "Yes, I did"). Add one or two concise supporting details using linking words and avoid repetitive phrases. Also use natural collocations ("pink bike" rather than "bike of pink color") and correct prepositions ("gifted to me by my grandfather").

예시: Yes, I did. I had a pink bike when I was a child, which my grandfather gave me as a present. I used to ride it to school and around the neighborhood almost every day, so it holds many happy memories.

제안: Make your answer more specific and use clearer reasons with correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence ("Yes, they are") and give one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Avoid vague phrases like "to travel to the country"; say "for short journeys" or "commuting". Use plural agreement and correct verb forms ("bikes are", "they help people").

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to get around. For example, many people use bicycles for short journeys and to commute to work, especially in crowded cities where parking is difficult.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'Have' is present tense; change to 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when referring to past time periods (e.g., 'When I was a child, I had a bike.').

× When I was a child it was of pink color and it was gifted to me from my grandfather.

✓ When I was a child it was pink and it was a gift from my grandfather.

'Of pink color' is an awkward adjective phrase in English; use 'pink' directly. 'It was gifted to me from my grandfather' is wordy and slightly incorrect: use 'it was a gift from my grandfather' or 'my grandfather gave it to me.' Also ensure past tense consistency. Suggestion: Prefer natural adjective forms ('it was pink') and use simple passive or active constructions ('it was a gift from my grandfather' or 'my grandfather gave it to me').

× I believe that in our country bikes are very popular because it is a mode of transport which help the person to move or to travel to the country.

✓ I believe that in our country bikes are very popular because they are a mode of transport that helps people get around or travel within the country.

Several issues: 'it' incorrectly refers to 'bikes' (plural) so use 'they'. 'Which help' should be 'that helps' when referring to 'a mode' (singular) or better restructure to match plural 'bikes' with 'help'. Also 'the person' is unnatural; use 'people'. 'To move' is incorrect collocation; use 'get around' or 'travel within the country.' Suggestion: Ensure pronoun number matches the noun (plural 'bikes' -> 'they'), choose natural verbs/collocations ('get around'), and keep subject-verb agreement ('bikes... help' or restructure to 'they are a mode... that helps people').