Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Shorten and structure your answer: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I did / No, I didn't), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words, and finish with a brief extra remark. Avoid repetition and keep sentences concise. Also correct small grammar slips (e.g., ‘uses’ → ‘used’, ‘didn't know’ → ‘don't know’ or ‘I didn't know’ depending on tense).

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bike that I nicknamed Neptune because of an anime hero who rode a similar bike. I loved riding it around the neighbourhood, and I was very proud of it. However, I don't know where it is now; I think my parents put it in storage.

제안: Begin with a direct opinion, then give two specific supporting points linked clearly (use linking words such as 'for example' and 'also'). Fix grammar (e.g., ‘rode’ → ‘ride’, ‘that commutes’ → ‘who commute’). Avoid vague phrases like ‘regardless of the dweller’ — be precise (e.g., ‘people of all ages’).

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, every Sunday during the car-free day many people cycle in the city centre, and I know three friends who commute to work by bike. Also, people of all ages cycle regularly, even in rain or sunshine.

× I think my parents have put it somewhere else where I didn't know.

✓ I think my parents have put it somewhere else that I don't know about.

The original sentence mixes present perfect ('have put') with a past-tense clause ('I didn't know'), creating a time reference mismatch and using an incorrect clause connector. Use a relative clause or a phrase that matches the present perfect context: 'that I don't know about' correctly expresses lack of current knowledge about the object's location. Suggestion: keep time frames consistent and use 'know about' after 'don't' for location knowledge.

× People rode it with pride.

✓ People ride them with pride.

The question asks about general popularity (a habitual or general fact), so present simple tense should be used rather than past tense. Also 'bikes' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' not 'it'. Use 'ride' for habitual action and 'them' for plural antecedent. Suggestion: use present simple for general statements and ensure pronoun number matches noun.

× I even have three friends that commutes to the office by bike.

✓ I even have three friends who commute to the office by bike.

The relative clause refers to 'three friends' (plural), so the verb must be plural: 'commute' not 'commutes'. Also use 'who' for people rather than 'that'. Suggestion: match verb number to the subject in relative clauses and prefer 'who' for people.

× And regardless of this, regardless of the dweller, whether it's raining, whether it's sunny.

✓ And regardless of who is traveling, people cycle whether it's raining or sunny.

The original fragment is ungrammatical and unclear ('regardless of the dweller' is awkward and the sentence lacks a main verb). Recast the idea into a complete sentence: identify the group ('who is traveling' or 'who lives here') and supply a verb. Also simplify weather contrast to 'whether it's raining or sunny.' Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a clear subject and verb and use natural collocations like 'whether it's raining or sunny'.

× I remember having a blue bike and I always called it Neptune because I once watched this anime where there's this hero that uses blue bike.

✓ I remember having a blue bike, and I always called it Neptune because I once watched an anime where a hero uses a blue bike.

Minor issues: use 'an anime' (article) and 'a blue bike' to be grammatical. The clause 'where there's this hero that uses blue bike' is informal and missing articles; use 'a hero who uses a blue bike.' Also use consistent simple past 'I always called' and 'I once watched' which is acceptable; adjust articles and relative pronoun for clarity. Suggestion: add appropriate articles ('an', 'a') and use 'who' for people; keep tense consistent.