Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (use past tense consistently), be concise, and give specific supporting details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds like “uh” and unfinished sentences.

예시: Yes. I had a blue bicycle when I was a child; blue was my favorite color. The bike had a comfortable saddle and a small basket, so I used it every day to ride to school and visit friends.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then support it with clear, specific reasons and a linking word. Use correct verb forms and prepositions, and avoid repetition and fillers.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many people use bicycles to commute short distances or to run errands, especially in crowded cities where traffic is heavy.

× Yes, I have a bike uh when I was uh 20 year old uh it was in blue color.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was 20 years old; it was blue.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses: 'have' should be past 'had' to match 'when I was'. '20 year old' is singular; correct form is '20 years old'. 'in blue color' is unnatural; use 'it was blue'. Also remove filler words and add punctuation for clarity.

× It is my favorite color uh uh.

✓ It was my favorite color.

Tense should match the past context ('was' rather than 'is'). 'Color' usage is fine but change tense. Remove filler 'uh uh'. Present tense 'is' conflicts with prior past-tense narrative.

× It is a very.

✓ It was very comfortable/fast/nice.

The fragment 'It is a very.' is incomplete; a noun or adjective must follow 'very' (for example 'very comfortable'). Also change to past tense 'was' to match context.

× Yes uh, in my country bikes are popular because uh, usually people used to uh go there with on their bikes and bike is uh very.

✓ Yes, in my country bicycles are popular because people usually used to go places on their bikes, and bikes were very common.

Mixes present 'are popular' with past 'used to'—choose 'used to' for past habits or remove it for present. 'Go there with on their bikes' is ungrammatical; use 'go places on their bikes'. 'bike is uh very' is a fragment; complete thought needed (e.g., 'were very common' or 'are very convenient'). Also 'bikes' plural or 'bicycle' form should be consistent.