Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and relevant. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, avoid unclear words (e.g., “vague”) and filler sounds (“uh”), and use correct verbs and tense. Add one supporting detail about when or why your father bought the bike. Keep it within 2–4 concise sentences and use linking words for coherence.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Recently, my father bought a bike for me because it is convenient for short trips. As a result, I now use it to commute to nearby shops and exercise on weekends.

제안: Answer directly and organize your ideas with linking words. Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons (traffic, cost, convenience). Use correct nouns (bike, bikers) and grammar (subject-verb agreement). Limit to 2–4 sentences and avoid repeating the same phrase.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Mainly because of heavy traffic and high car prices, many people choose bikes as an affordable and faster way to travel. Therefore, bikes are common for commuting and short errands.

× I didn't have any vague when I was a child but uh in recent my father bought a bike for me but I can't write this.

✓ I didn't have any bike when I was a child, but recently my father bought a bike for me, although I can't ride it.

The original sentence uses 'vague' which is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'bike'. 'Any' with a countable singular noun is incorrect; use 'any bike' is acceptable but clearer is 'a bike' for singular absence with 'didn't have'. 'in recent' is wrong phrase; use 'recently'. 'write' is incorrect verb — should be 'ride'. Also sentence run-on: use commas and conjunctions or split. Suggestion: learn correct vocabulary (ride vs write), use 'recently' for recent events, and ensure verb matches meaning.

× Is biker popular in my country because of in my country I have a lot of traffic jam so I can easily go anywhere and especially anyone can afford the bike rather than a car.

✓ Are bikes popular in my country? Because we have a lot of traffic jams, I can get around easily, and especially many people can afford a bike rather than a car.

The question 'Is biker popular' is incorrect: 'biker' is a person; the intended subject is 'bikes' (plural), so use 'Are bikes popular'. 'Because of in my country' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'because we have' or 'in my country we have'. 'Traffic jam' should be plural 'traffic jams' or 'a lot of traffic'. 'I have a lot of traffic jam so I can easily go anywhere' is unclear; 'Because of traffic jams, I can get around more easily' or rephrase to indicate bikes help avoid traffic. 'Anyone can afford the bike' should be 'many people can afford a bike'—'anyone' is too absolute. Suggestions: match singular/plural subjects and verbs, use correct nouns (traffic jam(s)), and choose appropriate quantifiers (many people).