Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct, grammatically correct topic sentence, avoid hesitation words, and use past tense consistently. Add one or two specific supporting details linked logically (use linking words like “so” or “because”) and keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I usually rode it to the local market because my family lived nearby, so it was faster and more convenient than walking. I also enjoyed riding it for fun around the neighborhood on weekends.

제안: Start with a clear opinion sentence, use natural collocations (e.g., “popular” not “famous”), avoid filler words, and use linking words for supporting details. Provide one or two specific reasons or examples (e.g., cost, traffic, culture) to make the answer richer and more precise.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them to commute to work or school because they are inexpensive and help avoid heavy traffic, so cycling is both practical and common in urban areas.

× Uh, yes, during my childhood I have a bike and whenever I have to go to market that time I, uh, use my bike.

✓ Uh, yes, during my childhood I had a bike and whenever I had to go to the market I used my bike.

The student is describing past habitual actions, so past tense forms are required. 'have' and 'have to' should be 'had' and 'had to', and 'use' should be 'used'. Also include the article 'the' before 'market' for specificity. Suggestion: use past simple for repeated actions in the past (had, had to, used) and include necessary articles.

× Yes, in my country bikes are very famous and many people use to commute to their work and their school, uh, by bikes.

✓ Yes, in my country bikes are very common and many people commute to work and to school by bike.

Several issues: 'famous' is incorrect for objects; 'common' or 'popular' is better. 'use to commute' is wrong: the correct structure is simply 'commute' (or 'use' + gerund: 'use bikes to commute'). 'to their work and their school' is wordy; 'to work and to school' is natural. 'by bikes' should be singular 'by bike' when indicating mode of transport. Suggestion: say 'bikes are very common' and use 'commute to work/to school by bike' or 'use bikes to commute'.