Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar and word order, avoid unclear phrases, and add one or two specific supporting details linked with a connector. Keep answer under five sentences.

예시: Yes — I had a bicycle when I was a child. My parents bought me a small black bike, and I learned to ride it in the local park when I was about seven. I used to ride it to visit friends and practice tricks on weekends.

제안: Be more precise and fluent: give a clear opinion, avoid hesitations, use a linking phrase to add a specific reason or example, and correct the statistic wording. Provide a concise supporting detail to justify your view.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, around half of families own at least one bike, especially in smaller towns where they are practical and affordable.

× It's what a small great black while my parents bought me and I learned to ride it in our local park when I was about 7.

✓ It was a small, dark, great bicycle that my parents bought me, and I learned to ride it in our local park when I was about seven.

The original sentence has fragmented and misplaced words ('what a small great black while') causing sentence structure errors (ID 26). Rearranged into a clear relative clause 'that my parents bought me' and corrected word order and choice: 'dark' is a natural adjective for color, commas separate multiple adjectives ('small, dark, great'), and 'was' matches past tense. Also spelled out the number 'seven' for formality and clarity.

× Umm, maybe one, one half one family still have one bicycle.

✓ Umm, maybe one and a half families still have one bicycle each.

The original has incorrect expression of a fraction and subject-verb agreement (ID 1 and 27). 'One, one half one family' is ungrammatical; use 'one and a half families' or better 'one and a half people per family' depending on meaning. To keep intended meaning (some families have a bicycle), 'one and a half families still have one bicycle each' clarifies quantity and keeps plural 'families' with plural form. Also 'have' agrees with plural subject 'families'. Alternatively, if meaning was 'one to one and a half people per family', rephrase accordingly.