Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak in the past tense consistently, make a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and keep it concise (max 3–4 short sentences). Add one or two specific details (age, where you rode, who with) and link them with words like "when" or "so" to make it coherent. For example, start with a direct answer: "Yes, I had a bike." Then add a simple reason and a specific detail.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon with my older brother. Because we lived near a park, we often cycled there to play and practice tricks.

제안: Give a direct opinion, avoid filler phrases like "so it depends" unless you explain the dependence, and finish your thought—don’t leave sentences hanging. Support your view with one specific reason or example and use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "however"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people cycle for leisure and short commutes. For example, families often ride together in parks on weekends, and some cities have dedicated bike lanes which encourage cycling.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child because when I was a child, my favorite one of my favorite hobby was writing or bicycling and I prefer to go cycling with my family.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because one of my favorite hobbies was writing or bicycling, and I preferred to go cycling with my family.

Errors: mixture of present and past tense ('do have' with 'when I was a child') and awkward phrasing. Use past tense consistently for childhood: 'had' and 'preferred'. Also correct noun phrase 'one of my favorite hobbies' and add a comma before 'and'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and simplify the hobby list. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× So it depends from my perspective. I think it's quite popular in my country because most people use bike as or go bicycling as their hobbies. But.

✓ So it depends on my perspective. I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because most people use bikes or go bicycling as hobbies.

Errors: wrong preposition 'depends from' should be 'depends on'. 'Use bike' needs plural or article; 'bicycles' or 'bikes'. Remove unnecessary 'as' after 'use' and 'as their hobbies' -> 'as hobbies'. Sentence fragment 'But.' should be removed. Suggestion: use 'depends on', plural nouns for general statements, and avoid sentence fragments. Grammar problem type ID: 11