Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, tense consistency and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common errors: use past tense ('had', 'was') and plural forms ('three wheels'). Keep answer concise (max 5 sentences).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red tricycle with three wheels, and my parents bought it for me when I was in the ninth grade. I used to ride it around our neighborhood every afternoon, which helped me gain confidence on two wheels later.

제안: Make your opinion direct, use clear linking words and correct word choice/grammar. Start with a topic sentence stating your view, then give two specific reasons (infrastructure and air pollution) with concise examples. Use singular/plural and articles correctly (e.g., 'few bicycle paths', 'air pollution', 'public transport').

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country, especially in Bangkok. One reason is the lack of dedicated bicycle paths, which makes cycling unsafe. Another reason is severe air pollution (PM2.5), so many people prefer cars or public transport like buses and the metro.

× Yes, I have one bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence uses the present tense verb 'have' but refers to a past time 'when I was a child', so the verb tense should be past ('had'). Also 'one' is unnecessary with 'a bike'; use the indefinite article 'a'. Suggestion: match tense to time expressions and use 'a' instead of 'one' for a single countable noun.

× It is a red one with three wheel and I started to bike at my 9th grade.

✓ It was a red one with three wheels, and I started biking in ninth grade.

There are multiple issues: 'wheel' should be plural 'wheels' (singular/plural error). The sentence also mixes past and present ('It is' vs past context) so 'is' should be 'was'. 'Started to bike' is grammatical but 'started biking' is more natural. Use 'in ninth grade' rather than 'at my 9th grade'. Suggestions: ensure noun-number agreement, keep consistent past tense, and use natural prepositions for school years.

× It is a red one with three wheel and I started to bike at my 9th grade.

✓ It was a red one with three wheels, and I started biking in ninth grade.

The clause 'It is a red one' uses present tense while the context is past ('when I was a child'). Tense must be consistent; change 'is' to 'was'. Also fix plural 'wheels' and improve verb form and preposition as noted.

× It is a red one with three wheel and I started to bike at my 9th grade.

✓ It was a red one with three wheels, and I started biking in ninth grade.

'Started to bike' is acceptable but 'started biking' is a more natural verb+ing construction after 'start'. Suggest using the -ing form for smoother, idiomatic speech.

× I started to bike at my 9th grade.

✓ I started biking in ninth grade.

Use 'in' with grade levels in English, not 'at'. Also use 'ninth grade' rather than 'my 9th grade'. Suggestion: use 'in' + grade and avoid ordinal numerals with 'my'.

× Umm, not definitely, because nowadays in Bangkok there are few bicycle pathway and due to the PM 2.5 pollutions people tend to transport with other vehicles such as car and public metropolitans rather than.

✓ Not really. Nowadays in Bangkok there are few bicycle paths, and because of PM2.5 pollution people tend to travel by other vehicles such as cars and public transport instead.

Multiple tense and word-choice issues: 'not definitely' is unidiomatic; use 'not really'. 'There are few bicycle pathway' has plural mismatch and incorrect noun form; use 'few bicycle paths' or 'few bike lanes'. 'Due to' is okay but 'because of' flows better here. 'PM 2.5 pollutions' should be 'PM2.5 pollution' (no plural). 'People tend to transport with other vehicles' is wrong; use 'people tend to travel by other vehicles'. 'Such as car and public metropolitans' should be 'such as cars and public transport'. 'Rather than' at the end is incomplete; replace with 'instead'. Suggestions: use correct plural nouns, correct collocations for pollution and transport, and choose natural adverbs/phrases.

× there are few bicycle pathway

✓ there are few bicycle paths

'Few' with a singular noun 'pathway' is incorrect. Use plural 'paths' or 'bike lanes'. Also 'few' implies scarcity and is correct here but must agree with a plural noun. Suggestion: use plural forms after quantifiers like 'few'.

× Umm, not definitely, because nowadays in Bangkok there are few bicycle pathway

✓ Not really, because nowadays in Bangkok there are few bicycle paths

'Not definitely' is an incorrect adverbial phrase; 'definitely' is an adverb that doesn't fit with 'not' in this context. Use 'not really' or 'definitely not'. Suggestion: choose idiomatic adverb phrases.

× I started to bike at my 9th grade.

✓ I started biking in ninth grade.

The use of 'my' with '9th grade' is unnecessary in this context. In English, grade levels are normally given without 'my' when stating when something happened. Suggestion: say 'in ninth grade'.