Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on clarity, correct vocabulary, and concise structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct word choice (use ‘ride’ or ‘cycle’ instead of ‘write’), avoid repetition and filler words, and add one or two specific supporting details. Keep answers to a maximum of 4–5 sentences and use a linking word when giving details.

예시: Yes, I did. My mother gave me a bicycle for my fifth birthday, and she taught me how to ride it. After that, I rode to school every day, which helped me gain confidence. I still remember feeling very proud the first time I cycled to school on my own.

제안: Improve pronunciation and word choice (use ‘bikes’ not ‘buys’), eliminate fillers, and give one specific reason with an example. Use a linking word to connect ideas (for example, “because” or “for instance”). Keep the response direct and include a brief supporting detail about who uses bikes or where.

예시: Yes, I do. Bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many students and commuters cycle to work or school to avoid traffic and reduce air pollution.

× My mom gave me a bike on my 5th birthday party.

✓ My mom gave me a bike on my 5th birthday.

'Birthday party' is not wrong but collocationally we say 'on my 5th birthday' when referring to receiving a gift on that day. Keep past simple 'gave' which is correct for a completed past action.

× She taught me how to write it and I wrote.

✓ She taught me how to ride it, and I did.

The original uses 'write' and 'wrote' which are incorrect verbs for using a bicycle. The correct verb is 'ride' and since the teaching and the doing are past events, 'She taught me how to ride it, and I did.' uses past simple and a short form 'did' to avoid repetition.

× I wrote to school every day by uh, when I was young and I feel very proud of myself when I first cycled uh, alone.

✓ I rode my bike to school every day when I was young, and I felt very proud of myself when I first cycled alone.

Several tense and word-choice issues: 'wrote to school' is wrong; the correct verb is 'rode (my bike) to school.' The first clause refers to a repeated past action so past simple 'rode' fits. The second clause describes a past feeling at the time of first cycling, so use past simple 'felt' not present 'feel.' Also remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary 'by'.

× Yes I do uh, buys are very popular in my country because they are affordable and easy to use.

✓ Yes I do. Bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and easy to use.

The speaker used 'buys' (incorrect word) instead of 'bikes.' Also the original run-on sentence needs a full stop. 'Bikes' is plural and 'are' correctly agrees; change 'buys' to 'bikes.'

× Uh, many people choose to use uh buys because they want to, uh, reduce the pollution such as air pollution or emissions.

✓ Many people choose to use bikes because they want to reduce pollution, such as air pollution and emissions.

Again 'buys' should be 'bikes.' Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary commas. 'Reduce the pollution such as air pollution or emissions' is awkward; better: 'reduce pollution, such as air pollution and emissions.' Use plural nouns consistently and avoid 'the' before uncountable 'pollution.'