Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, tense consistency and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "No, I didn't have a bike as a child.") then give one or two specific reasons using correct past tense and linking words. Avoid repetition and filler sounds ("uh"). Mention the law briefly and how it affected you personally to add specific detail.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike as a child. In my home country it is illegal for people under 18 to ride motorcycles, so I only learned to ride after I turned 18.

제안: Make the answer more fluent and precise. Begin with a direct opinion ("Yes, bikes are very popular"). Use linking words to add two clear supporting points (convenience and long-distance use) and give a specific example or brief reason to support each point. Correct grammar (e.g., "prefer" and "for travel") and avoid fillers.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for daily commuting. For example, many people use motorcycles to travel to work and even for longer trips between nearby towns because they save time and fuel.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a guy when I were a kid as in my back home country it is not allowed to ride a bike till uh, 18 years old.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because in my home country it is not allowed to ride a bike until you are 18 years old.

The original mixes present tense 'don't have' with past time 'when I was' and uses incorrect pronoun 'guy' and incorrect verb 'were'. Use past simple 'didn't have' for a past situation. Replace informal 'guy' with 'child' and 'back home country' with 'home country'. Use 'until you are 18 years old' to express the legal age; present simple 'are' is acceptable for general truths about age limits. Also remove filler words and correct word order for clarity.

× After 18 years uh you, you can write a bike as a law.

✓ After 18 years, you can ride a bike according to the law.

The sentence uses 'write a bike' which is incorrect verb choice; the correct verb is 'ride'. No third person singular verb issue here, but verb choice and wording were wrong. Use 'according to the law' or 'by law' for legal statements and keep subject-verb agreement 'you can ride' is correct.

× Yes, in my country there are many, uh, many people are fond of bikes and they are prefer more convenient for a traveling and uh, they are also travel, uh, through bikes in a longer ways.

✓ Yes, in my country many people are fond of bikes because they are more convenient for traveling, and people also use bikes for longer journeys.

The original has redundant phrases ('many, uh, many people'), incorrect verb forms ('are prefer', 'are also travel'), and awkward noun phrases ('a traveling', 'in a longer ways'). Use 'many people are fond of bikes' or 'many people like bikes'. 'Prefer' should be used without 'are' (e.g., 'they prefer'), or rephrase to 'because they are more convenient'. Use 'traveling' without an article and 'longer journeys' or 'longer distances' instead of 'in a longer ways'. This corrects verb forms, removes redundancy, and clarifies meaning.