Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the tense consistent and start with a clear topic sentence. Use past tense for childhood, reduce redundancy, and add a brief specific reason or example. Keep it under five sentences and use a linking word when giving the reason.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I wasn't allowed to ride around our neighborhood because the roads were busy and my parents were worried about safety.

제안: Avoid fillers like "umm" and be more specific about who uses bikes and why. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details using a linking word (e.g., "because" or "for example"). Use varied vocabulary such as "commonly used" or "affordable."

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many city residents use bicycles to save money on fuel and avoid traffic, and cycling is also promoted as an affordable and healthy option.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child because I was not allowed to bike around our community or neighborhood.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was not allowed to ride around our community or neighborhood.

The sentence mixes present tense ('I don't have') with past time reference ('when I was a child'). Use past simple 'I didn't have'. Also use the correct verb for cycling: 'ride' or 'ride a bike' rather than 'bike' as a verb is informal; 'ride' is clearer. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent with past time (didn't have; was not allowed to ride).

× Yes, bikes are widely used as a mode of transportation, especially in our city because, umm, we're trying to save for the gasoline or diesel expenses.

✓ Yes, bikes are widely used as a mode of transportation, especially in our city, because we are trying to save on gasoline and diesel expenses.

The original phrase 'save for the gasoline or diesel expenses' is incorrect preposition use and phrasing. Use 'save on' to indicate reducing spending for something. Also avoid filler 'umm' in written answers. Use 'and' instead of 'or' when referring collectively to both types of fuel. Ensure present continuous 'we are trying' is fine for current ongoing effort; keep as 'we are trying to save on gasoline and diesel expenses.'