Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., duplicate words) and finish the answer cleanly. Also correct tense and article use ("I loved it because it had a vibrant colour" or "I loved it because of its vibrant colour").

예시: I had a bright red bicycle when I was seven. It was my favorite because of its vibrant colour, and I used it to explore the neighbourhood every afternoon. Because it was lightweight, I could ride for hours without getting tired.

제안: Reduce hesitations and filler words (uh, actually). Give a direct topic sentence, then add one specific comparison or reason using linking words. Fix grammar ("you can see them everywhere; they are used as daily transport"). Keep the answer within 3–4 sentences and avoid trailing off.

예시: Bicycles are fairly popular in my country, but they are even more common here in London. For example, many people use them for commuting because there are bike lanes and bike-sharing schemes, so you can see them everywhere during rush hour.

× Yes, I had a bright red bicycle when I was 7 and I love it because had this vibrant color and I use it to to go around the neighborhoods and.

✓ Yes, I had a bright red bicycle when I was seven and I loved it because it had this vibrant color and I used it to go around the neighbourhoods.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. The context is a past habit (having a bike as a child), so verbs should be in the past tense: 'love' -> 'loved', 'had' needs a subject 'it had', and 'use' -> 'used'. Also correct '7' to 'seven' in formal writing and remove the duplicated 'to'. Use 'neighbourhoods' (British spelling) to match 'England' if desired. Suggestions: keep all verbs consistently in past tense when describing past experiences and ensure each verb has an appropriate subject. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× In my country, bikes are popular, but I found out that, uh, actually in this country, England, especially London, uh, they are more, more popular. You can see them everywhere is like a daily transport for everyone and.

✓ In my country, bikes are popular, but I have found that in England, especially London, they are even more popular. You can see them everywhere; they are like a daily means of transport for many people.

The original mixes past ('found out') with present description awkwardly and has a sentence fragment 'You can see them everywhere is like a daily transport'. Use present perfect 'have found' to link past observation to present relevance, and rephrase the second clause into two clear sentences. Replace 'is like a daily transport for everyone' with 'they are like a daily means of transport for many people' for grammatical subject-verb agreement and clarity. Remove filler words ('uh') and duplicated words. Suggestions: use present perfect for experiences that have current relevance, ensure subject-verb agreement, and split run-on fragments into complete sentences. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)