Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Используйте простое, прямое вступление и правильное время (прошедшее). Уберите повторения и исправьте порядок слов. Добавьте одно-два конкретных подробных предложения с логическими связками (например, 'although' или 'so') и избегайте грамматических ошибок (например, 'I didn't have' вместо 'I don't have', 'when my brother was asleep' вместо 'when my brother slept me'). Ограничьте ответ до 3–4 предложений, чтобы быть естественным и точным.

예시: I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my older brother did. I used to sneak out and try to ride his bicycle when he was asleep, which felt very exciting. Although I couldn't ride well, those moments are my fondest childhood memories.

제안: Говорите чётко и логично: начните с прямого ответа (Yes/No/Not really), потом объясните причину с точными словами. Избегайте неясных фраз ('I want to visit' неуместно) и используйте подходящие связки ('however', 'because', 'in my country'). Дайте конкретный пример или прогноз. Используйте правильную грамматику (например, 'more popular than now' вместо 'more popular as it's now').

예시: Not really — bicycles aren't very popular in my country compared with cars. However, I think cycling could become more common in the future because it is environmentally friendly and cheaper for short trips. For example, some cities are already adding bike lanes, which may encourage more people to ride.

× Oh it's really good question but I I don't have a bike when I was a child child but my brother had and I was trying to ride a bicycle when my brother slept me and it was the coolest time ever.

✓ Oh, that's a really good question. I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my brother did, and I tried to ride his bicycle when my brother was asleep. It was the coolest time ever.

The original contains multiple sentence structure and verb-tense mistakes. Use past simple for events in the past: 'didn't have' and 'did' (auxiliary for do) instead of 'don't have' and 'had' for contrast. 'I was trying to ride' is acceptable but 'I tried to ride' is clearer for a single past event. 'When my brother slept me' is ungrammatical; the correct passive/state is 'when my brother was asleep.' Also split into separate sentences for clarity and add appropriate punctuation. Suggestion: practice forming past simple negatives with 'didn't + base verb' and use 'was/were + adjective' for states (was asleep).

× I don't think that they are so popular as that seems to, but I want to visit.

✓ I don't think they are as popular as they seem, but I would like to visit.

The phrase 'as that seems to' is ungrammatical and awkward. Use 'as they seem' to compare current perception. 'I want to visit' is unclear in context; likely 'I would like to visit' is more polite and fits speaking context. The sentence requires correct comparative structure 'as + adjective + as'. Suggestion: practice comparative patterns 'as + adjective + as' and using 'seem' with a clear subject (they seem).

× A bicycle will be more popular as it's now because riding a bicycle is really good influence to our nature.

✓ Bicycles will be more popular than they are now because riding a bicycle is really beneficial for the environment.

Use comparative 'more popular than' (not 'as it's now'). 'A bicycle' should be plural 'Bicycles' when speaking generally. 'Is really good influence to our nature' is ungrammatical: use 'beneficial for the environment' or 'good for the environment.' Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements, use 'more ... than' for comparisons, and collocations like 'beneficial for' or 'good for' with 'the environment'.