Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, yeah), use past tense consistently, and add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike when I was about seven years old, and my father taught me to ride it. Because it was lightweight and had training wheels at first, I learned quickly and enjoyed riding around the neighborhood every afternoon.

제안: Correct pronunciation and word choice (bikes, not backs), remove hesitations, and organize ideas with linking words. Give a clear reason and a specific example (e.g., bike lanes, bike-sharing schemes) to support your opinion.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are becoming very popular in my country. For example, many cities have added bike lanes and bike-share programs, so more people choose cycling for short trips. As a result, cycling is seen as a healthier and more convenient option than driving in busy traffic.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'did have' is grammatically correct for emphasis, but in a simple past answer the normal form is 'I had.' Use the simple past 'had' to sound natural and concise in this context. Suggestion: use 'I had' unless you want to emphasize or contrast.

× I still remember it was red and it is a small one since when I had it I was like, uh, seven years old.

✓ I still remember it was red and it was small because I got it when I was about seven years old.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses ('it is' with past context) and uses awkward phrasing ('small one' and 'since when I had it I was like'). Use past tense consistently ('it was small') and clearer connectors ('because' or 'as' and 'when I was about seven'). Suggestion: keep tense consistent and replace informal fillers with precise words.

× Yeah, and my dad taught me how to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, my dad taught me how to ride a bike.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense. The only change made is stylistic: replace 'Yeah, and' with 'Yes,' to match the formality of the exam. Suggestion: use concise responses in test settings.

× Yes, I think backs are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

The student used 'backs' which is a misspelling of 'bikes.' Correct the noun to 'bikes.' Also ensure spelling accuracy. Suggestion: proofread for similar-sounding word errors.

× Umm, I can see many people riding their bikes on the road and the bikes are the backs are more and more right now.

✓ I can see many people riding their bikes on the road, and bikes are becoming more and more common now.

This sentence has repetition ('the bikes are the backs are'), a misspelling ('backs'), and awkward tense/word choice. Replace repetition with a single noun, correct spelling to 'bikes,' and use 'are becoming more and more common' to express gradual increase. Suggestion: remove repeated phrases and use 'become' + adjective/adverb to express change over time.

× I think it's because more and more people pay attention to the health.

✓ I think it's because more and more people are paying attention to their health.

The phrase 'the health' is incorrect here. Use the plural possessive 'their health' to refer to people's health in general, and use the present continuous 'are paying' to emphasize an ongoing trend. Suggestion: use 'their health' and consider present continuous for ongoing actions.