Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (what the bike looked like, who gave it to you, a memory about learning to ride). Use correct vocabulary (bike, not bag) and avoid repetition. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use a linking word when adding the memory (for example, “and”, “after that”, “because”).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle that my father bought for me, and I remember feeling very excited the day I received it. My dad taught me how to ride it in our local park, and after a few tries I was able to cycle on my own.

제안: Answer directly and use correct nouns (bikes). Give specific reasons and one or two examples or comparisons. Use linking words (for example, “because”, “so”, “also”) to make your points coherent. Avoid repetition such as “popular and popular” and incorrect plural forms.

예시: Yes, bikes are becoming increasingly popular in my country. Many people commute by bicycle in cities because it is cheaper and faster than driving during rush hour, and also because more people are concerned about fitness and the environment. For example, my colleagues often cycle to work to save time and stay active.

× I did have a bag when I was a child, I can still remember it was right and it's a small one which was bought by my dad.

✓ I did have a bike when I was a child; I can still remember it was red and it was a small one which was bought by my dad.

Errors: the student wrote 'bag' and later 'ride the bag' which is incorrect word choice; 'right' is a spelling/word error and should be 'red'. Also the compound sentence needs clearer punctuation and consistent past tense. Suggestion: use the correct noun 'bike', correct adjective 'red', keep past tense 'was', and separate clauses with a semicolon or period for clarity.

× Umm. I was so happy when I got the bag and my dad taught me how to ride the bag.

✓ I was so happy when I got the bike, and my dad taught me how to ride it.

Errors: repeated incorrect noun 'bag' should be 'bike'; pronoun use 'the bag' repeated is awkward. Also ensure pronoun 'it' refers to 'bike'. Keep past tense 'got' and 'taught'. Suggestion: replace nouns correctly and use 'it' for the second reference.

× I think backs are popular in my country and it's getting popular and popular.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country, and they are becoming more and more popular.

Errors: 'backs' is wrong word; should be 'bikes'. 'It's getting popular and popular' is ungrammatical and unclear; use plural subject 'they' since 'bikes' is plural, and the progressive 'are becoming' with 'more and more popular' is correct. Suggestion: use correct noun and match verb form and number with the subject.

× I can say a lot of people are riding their bags on the street.

✓ I can say a lot of people are riding their bikes on the street.

Errors: 'bags' is wrong noun; should be 'bikes'. Also 'their' agrees in plural but must match corrected noun. Suggestion: replace incorrect noun and keep present continuous 'are riding' to describe habitual/current behavior.

× I think the reason why bags are getting more and more is people are paying attention to their health.

✓ I think the reason bikes are becoming more and more popular is that people are paying more attention to their health.

Errors: wrong noun 'bags' should be 'bikes'; awkward structure 'are getting more and more' lacks 'popular' and missing conjunction 'that' before clause; 'paying attention to their health' is fine but adding 'more' clarifies comparison. Suggestion: use 'are becoming more and more popular' and include 'is that' to introduce the reason clause.