Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (who bought it, what it looked like, how you used it). Use correct tense and reduce repetition. Also use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas. Aim for 2–4 sentences and correct minor grammar errors (e.g., "I had" instead of "I've got", "it was quite professional" instead of "it was like very professional").

예시: I had a really nice bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me because he wanted me to have my own bike, and it looked quite professional with a strong frame and thick tires. I used it to ride around the neighborhood almost every day, so I learned to be confident on two wheels early on.

제안: Give a clear direct answer first, then support it with two specific reasons or examples. Avoid hesitation words (wow, like) and repetition. Use linking words (for example, also, because) and more precise vocabulary (shared bikes, widespread, residents). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, shared bike schemes are widespread in cities, and you can see bikes parked on almost every street. Also, many residents learn to ride as children, so cycling remains a common and convenient way to travel.

× Yes, I've got a really nice bike.

✓ Yes, I had a really nice bike.

The question asks about having a bike when the student was a child (past time). Using present perfect 'I've got' is inappropriate for that past reference. Change to simple past 'I had' to match the past context.

× When I was a child it was like very professional and it's only for child because my father bought it for me and he thinks he thought that I if it will be better if I got a bike of my own and I could ride it to anywhere I want.

✓ When I was a child it was very professional and it was only for children because my father bought it for me; he thought it would be better if I had a bike of my own so I could ride it anywhere I wanted.

This original sentence contains multiple issues: incorrect tense sequence, awkward fillers ('like'), incorrect singular/plural ('child' -> 'children'), mixed present and past ('it's' with past narrative), and conditional tense mistakes. Corrections: remove 'like' as a filler, use 'was' consistently for past narrative, change 'only for child' to 'only for children', use 'he thought' (simple past) and 'it would be better' (conditional past), change 'if I got' to 'if I had' and 'to anywhere I want' to 'anywhere I wanted' to keep past reference and correct tense agreement.

× Wow. I think it is like we only even have sharing bike.

✓ Wow. I think we even only have shared bikes.

'Sharing bike' is incorrect noun phrase. Use 'shared bikes' (plural) to refer generally to bike-sharing services. Also article 'the' is not needed; word order 'even only' is awkward so 'even only' -> 'we even only have' or better 'we only have shared bikes'.

× You could see bikes almost everywhere in the street.

✓ You can see bikes almost everywhere on the streets.

Preposition and article usage: use 'on the streets' or 'in the streets' for general locations; 'in the street' implies a specific street. Also present simple 'can' fits general statement better than 'could'.

× And I I believe that most of our most of our citizens could ride a bike.

✓ I believe that most of our citizens can ride a bike.

Remove repeated words, choose correct modal verb: 'can' expresses ability in general, while 'could' may imply past or conditional. Remove redundant 'most of our'.

× Yeah. So I think it is very popular.

✓ So I think bikes are very popular.

Use plural 'bikes' to match subject and plural agreement with 'are'. Keeping present simple 'are' fits general present-tense statement. 'It is' is vague; specifying 'bikes' clarifies the subject.