Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, avoid filler words (uh, um), give a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one or two specific supporting details (age, color, a short memory) using linking words for coherence. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and correct grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement, proper tense).

예시: Yes, I did. I got a bike when I was five; it was red and green. I used to ride it with my father every weekend, which helped me feel confident and independent.

제안: Start with a direct answer (Yes/No/Not really), then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, therefore). Avoid repetition and filler words, and use correct phrasing (e.g., "not popular" rather than "not a popular"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Not really — bikes are not very popular in my country. For example, people prefer cars, even though bikes would reduce traffic congestion and lower air pollution, so I wish more people would cycle.

× Uh, personally speaking, uh, having a bike is the biggest, uh, dream of a person, uh, when, uh, during, in, in their childhood.

✓ Personally speaking, having a bike is the biggest dream for a person during their childhood.

Redundant filler words and incorrect preposition sequence made the sentence awkward. 'Having a bike' as a gerund phrase is fine (present participle use), but 'when, during, in, in their childhood' mixes temporal phrases. Use a single preposition 'during' and 'for a person' is clearer. Also remove filler 'uh' and duplicate words to improve fluency.

× And I remember, uh, I had a bike, uh, when I was five, I think, uh, it was a red and, uh, and uh, green and the one day.

✓ I remember I had a bike when I was five; I think it was red and green one day.

Sentence has tense consistency but is disfluent and contains extra conjunctions. Use past tense 'had' and 'was' consistently. Remove repeated 'and' and filler 'uh'. 'The one day' is incorrect; use 'one day' or restructure to 'there was one day' if describing an event. Here 'one day' fits.

× My father and I went out and my.

✓ My father and I went out together.

Sentence fragment ending with 'my' lacks a verb or object, creating a sentence structure error. Complete the sentence by supplying the missing element; 'went out together' finishes the idea.

× Uh, in my opinion, uh, bike, bikes are not a popular in my country, but I wish it was uh, because uh, it reduces uh, the traffic jam and also it reduces and uh, decrease decreases uh, the uh, pollution, air pollution exactly and.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are not popular in my country, but I wish they were, because they reduce traffic jams and decrease air pollution.

Multiple errors: 'bike, bikes' shows hesitation—use plural 'bikes'. 'a popular' is incorrect article usage for nouns; use 'popular' without 'a'. Subject-pronoun agreement: replace 'it' with 'they' for plural 'bikes', and use past-subjunctive 'were' after 'I wish'. Verb forms: use plural verbs 'reduce' and 'decrease' to match 'they'. Also use plural noun 'traffic jams' and 'air pollution' without repetition. Remove filler words for clarity.