Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and concise supporting detail. Correct basic grammar (past tense, articles, numbers) and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to show contrast (e.g., "but", "so"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and be specific about the age and what actually happened.

예시: Yes. When I was about five years old, I asked my mother to buy me a bicycle because I loved riding. However, the exact bike I wanted was out of stock, so my mother bought me a small balance bike instead.

제안: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then add specific supporting details and linking words (e.g., "however", "for example"). Improve vocabulary (e.g., "popular", "common", "leisure"). Be precise about where and how bikes are used and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in the Philippines, although usage varies by city. For example, in my town in the northern Philippines many families ride bicycles for leisure at a local park, and cycling is becoming more common for short trips and exercise.

× I have no idea whether how old am I when I was a child, but when I was like young about 5 year old, I I had a dream and I had a request to my mother to buy me a bike.

✓ I have no idea how old I was when I was a child, but when I was about five years old I had a dream and asked my mother to buy me a bike.

Issues: incorrect word order in indirect question ('whether how old am I'), wrong tense order and redundancy ('when I was a child' plus 'am I'), incorrect age expression ('5 year old' should be 'five years old'), repetition ('I I'), and awkward phrasing ('had a request to my mother'). Suggestion: Use correct indirect question word order ('how old I was'), keep past tense for childhood events, write ages as 'five years old' and use 'asked my mother' instead of 'had a request'. Use concise phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Unfortunately when we went to the shop it was like it's not unavailable that's why my mom bought a bar.

✓ Unfortunately, when we went to the shop the bike was unavailable, so my mom bought a car.

Issues: incorrect and contradictory verb forms ('it's not unavailable' mixes present with double negative), unclear noun ('bar' likely intended 'car' or 'bike'), and missing punctuation. Suggestion: Keep past tense and simple clear wording: 'the bike was unavailable, so my mom bought a car' or specify the correct item. Remove double negatives and match tense. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Well, it depends on the city and my city.

✓ Well, it depends on the city and on my city.

Issue: missing preposition 'on' before 'my city' to parallel the structure 'depends on'. Suggestion: Use parallel prepositional phrases: 'depends on the city and on my city' or better: 'depends on the city; in my city...'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I live in the northern part of the Philippines and we have a bike or a park that we used to like go there for leisure time.

✓ I live in the northern part of the Philippines and we have a bike park that we used to go to for leisure time.

Issues: 'a bike or a park' is confused—likely 'bike park'; incorrect verb phrase 'used to like go there' should be 'used to go to'; misplaced preposition. Suggestion: Use correct noun 'bike park' and the verb pattern 'used to go to' for habitual past actions. Keep prepositions with verbs ('go to a place'). Grammar problem type ID:11

× So my family and I always go there.

✓ So my family and I always go there.

This sentence is grammatically correct but ensure consistency: if talking about habitual current action, present simple 'always go' is correct. No change needed. Grammar problem type ID:6