Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid irrelevant phrases (e.g. “when I was tired”) and reduce hesitations. Use correct tense (past) and combine short fragments into full sentences with linking words if needed.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that I really liked. I used it to ride to my friend’s house and around the neighborhood almost every day, and it was especially useful for quick trips to the corner shop.

제안: Answer directly then give a specific reason with clearer structure and fewer hesitations. Use plural nouns and smoother linking words (for example, “because” or “for example”). Add one concrete detail or statistic if possible to strengthen your point.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, many businesses provide bikes or motorbikes to delivery workers because food delivery is a huge industry, and these vehicles are a cheap and efficient way to transport orders in busy cities.

× Yeah, when I was tired. I have a bike I like, small bike.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child I had a bike I liked, a small bike.

The student uses present tense 'have' and 'like' but the question asks about childhood, so past tense is required. This is a Present tense issue (ID 6). Correct use: 'was' and 'had' and 'liked' to match past timeframe; add article 'a' before 'small bike' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use past simple for actions or states that happened in the past (I had, I liked).

× Yeah, bike is very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

The student uses singular 'bike' with no article where a general statement about all bikes requires plural 'bikes' (ID 1). Also use 'are' to agree with plural. Suggestion: use plural to talk about general popularity (Bikes are popular).

× Many, uh, many businesses, uh, uh, many businesses give bikes because, uh, food delivery.

✓ Many businesses give bikes because of food delivery.

The original repeats phrases and omits the preposition 'of' after 'because', causing a sentence structure and preposition problem (primary issue: Sentence structure errors, ID 26). Condense repetition and add 'of' to form the correct phrase 'because of food delivery'. Suggestion: speak concisely and include necessary prepositions: 'Many businesses give bikes because of food delivery.'