Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and natural, start with a clear topic sentence and avoid phrases like "Bring up". Keep it concise (max 5 sentences) and give a brief reason or context for learning late. Use linking words such as "but" or "however" correctly. Improve grammar (use past simple) and word order.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I only learned to ride when I was in the ninth grade because my family couldn't afford one earlier. However, once I learned, I used to cycle to school and around my neighborhood.

제안: Answer directly then give specific supporting details. Correct grammar and word choice (avoid repetition like "there there"), and be more precise about types of bikes and who uses them. Use linking words (for example, "for instance", "on the other hand") to organize ideas. Keep to 2–4 concise sentences and use vocabulary relevant to transport and demographics.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For instance, many people use motorbikes for commuting, while others ride pedal bicycles for leisure or short trips. In rural areas, traditional pedal bikes are still common, especially among older people and children.

× Bring up I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The phrase 'Bring up' is unnecessary and incorrectly placed at the start, causing a sentence structure error. Remove it to form a clear past-tense statement. Use 'I didn't have' to correctly express lack of possession in the past.

× However, I learned to ride a bike when I was in 9th grade already.

✓ However, I learned to ride a bike when I was in ninth grade.

The meaning requires simple past tense 'learned', which is correct, but 'already' is redundant and awkward here and '9th' should be written in words in formal speech: 'ninth grade.' Removing 'already' results in a clearer sentence.

× Bikes are popular in our country, but there there are variety.

✓ Bikes are popular in our country, but there is a variety.

The original has a duplicate 'there' and a noun phrase agreement issue. Use singular 'there is' with 'a variety' or plural 'there are various types.' Choose 'there is a variety' to match the intended meaning.

× It can be big bikes that most people know as mothers and also bikes that actually have pedals.

✓ They can be the large motorbikes that many people call motos and also bicycles that have pedals.

Pronoun and noun agreement and word choice are unclear. 'It' should be 'They' to refer to 'bikes.' 'Big bikes' is vague; if meaning motorbikes use 'motorbikes' or 'large motorbikes.' 'Know as mothers' is incorrect; perhaps 'call motos' or 'call motorcycles.' Also contrast with 'bicycles that have pedals.' Adjust plural forms to agree with 'They.'