Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural, concise and better organized. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid filler sounds, and add one specific supporting detail (e.g., where you rode or who you rode with). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words if needed.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it every weekend around my neighborhood with my friends, especially to the park, but I gradually stopped as I grew older and had less free time.

제안: Be more concise and confident. Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with clear linking words (for example, ‘because’ or ‘for example’). Remove hesitations and repetitive phrases, and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘public transport’ or ‘private cars’).

예시: No, bikes are not very popular in my country. This is because we have extensive public transport and many people prefer cars for convenience, so cycling is uncommon for daily commuting.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about possession in the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense 'had' rather than present 'have'. Use past simple to match the time frame of 'when you were a child'. Suggestion: say 'I had a bike' to keep tense consistent.

× When I was a child I liked riding on it, uh, particularly during weekends when I was young.

✓ When I was a child, I liked riding it, particularly on weekends.

The phrase 'riding on it' is awkward; 'ride' takes a direct object, so 'riding it' is correct. Also 'during weekends' is non-idiomatic; use 'on weekends'. Remove the redundant clause 'when I was young' because 'When I was a child' already sets the time. Suggestion: streamline to 'When I was a child, I liked riding it, particularly on weekends.'

× However, I've really outgrown this habit now.

✓ However, I have really outgrown that habit now.

This sentence is mostly acceptable, but 'this habit' is less natural when referring back to a previously mentioned activity; 'that habit' is clearer. The present perfect 'have outgrown' is appropriate because it connects past change to the present. Suggestion: use 'that' for reference clarity: 'I have really outgrown that habit.'

× Honestly, I don't think bikes are popular in my country because we have a, uh, I think we have relatively more advanced, uh, transportation system so that people actually rely on the usage of transportation instead of the bike.

✓ Honestly, I don't think bikes are popular in my country because we have a relatively more advanced transportation system, so people actually rely on public transport instead of bicycles.

Problems include redundancy ('we have, I think we have'), article misuse ('a relatively more advanced transportation system' should be 'a relatively advanced transportation system' or 'relatively more advanced' without extra 'a'), and awkward phrasing ('rely on the usage of transportation' is incorrect). Replace with 'rely on public transport' or 'public transportation' and 'bicycles' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: simplify and remove hesitations: 'we have a relatively advanced transportation system, so people rely on public transport instead of bicycles.'

× So that's why umm, people don't really rely on bike for commuting.

✓ So that's why, umm, people don't really rely on bikes for commuting.

'Bike' is singular but refers to bicycles in general; use the plural 'bikes' with 'people' to indicate general usage. Also include the preposition 'on' already present; keep it: 'rely on bikes for commuting.' Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking about general habits: 'people don't rely on bikes.'