Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, use correct verb forms, and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences. For example, say you had a bike, describe one specific memory and link it to why it was enjoyable.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a bright red bicycle that was quite fast, and I used to race it with my friends around the neighborhood. Because it was lightweight and had good brakes, we often competed to see who could ride the longest without stopping.

제안: Answer directly and give specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and informal fillers. Make a clear statement about popularity, then support it with 1–2 concise, specific reasons (e.g., transport cost, culture, weather).

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For one thing, they are an affordable way for young people to travel, and moreover many cities have good bike lanes that make cycling convenient and safe.

× Actually, yes, uh, it was uh, good bike and it, it was very fast and I it, it were a good thing to do with the, with your friends and playing and uh, making a speed test yes.

✓ Actually, yes. It was a good bike and it was very fast, and it was a good thing to do with your friends, playing and doing speed tests.

Multiple article errors and other issues: missing definite/indefinite article before 'good bike' (should be 'a good bike'), incorrect verb form 'were' instead of 'was' (subject-verb agreement), extra words 'I it, it' are redundant and ungrammatical, and awkward phrase 'making a speed test' is better as 'doing speed tests'. Suggestion: Use the indefinite article 'a' before singular countable nouns, ensure the verb agrees with singular subject ('it was'), remove filler repetition, and use natural collocations such as 'playing' and 'doing speed tests'.

× Actually, yes, in my country you have to get a bike to play with your friends and try to get out of your home and start making friends and new friends and your and your relationships. Yeah.

✓ Actually, yes. In my country people often get a bike to play with friends, go outside, and meet new people to build relationships.

The original sentence has sentence structure errors and redundancy: 'you have to get a bike' sounds like obligation when likely describing common practice; repeated phrases 'making friends and new friends and your and your relationships' are redundant and ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use a neutral subject 'people' for general statements, use parallel structure for the list ('play with friends, go outside, and meet new people'), and avoid repeating words. This produces a clearer, grammatically correct sentence.