Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using linking words. Correct mistakes like repeated words, wrong adjective, and awkward phrase order (e.g. "small red bicycle" and "without training wheels"). Keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with no training wheels, so I learned to ride quickly. Because it was lightweight, I could take it to the park every afternoon.

제안: Answer directly and use clearer vocabulary and grammar. Give one reason and one specific example, linking them with a connector (for example, "because" or "so"). Replace vague words like "convey" with "get around" or "commute" and avoid fillers ('uh'). Aim for 2–3 sentences with correct subject-verb agreement.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an inexpensive and convenient way to get around. For example, many people cycle to work and school, especially in crowded cities where traffic is bad.

× It was a small bike bike.

✓ It was a small bike.

The sentence repeats the noun 'bike' twice, which is a duplication error rather than a pluralization issue. Remove the extra word to make it grammatically correct. Suggestion: proofread aloud to notice accidental repetition.

× It was a small bred bicycle without training with.

✓ It was a small, bred bicycle without training wheels.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and a wrong noun ('with' placed at the end) making it ungrammatical. The likely intended meaning is a small bicycle with a particular style ('bred' may be a misuse; if you meant 'red', replace 'bred' with 'red'). Also 'training with' should be 'training wheels'. Suggestion: identify the intended adjective and noun (color or type) and place adjectives before the noun; use the correct noun 'wheels' after 'training'.

× Yes, there are bikes, uh, are popular in my country because uh, it is a more easy to uh, convey.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because they are an easier way to get around.

The original contains redundant 'are' and wrong structure 'there are bikes, are popular'. Use simple present 'bikes are popular'. Pronoun agreement: 'they' refers to bikes (plural) instead of 'it'. 'It is a more easy to convey' is ungrammatical and uses wrong verb 'convey'; use 'an easier way to get around' or 'to travel'. Suggestion: use simple present for general statements, match plural nouns with plural pronouns, and choose appropriate verbs/phrases for movement (get around/travel).