Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify tense and fix grammar, give a clear topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details with linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep answers under five sentences. For example, start with a direct answer (‘Yes, I did’) then add age/time and specific activities, using linking words like ‘when’ or ‘then’.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was in grade three I often borrowed a bike from my friends and rode it around my neighborhood for fun. Later I bought my own bike, and riding became an important part of my childhood because it helped me explore the area and stay active.

제안: Provide a clear, direct opinion first, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Improve vocabulary (use ‘popular’, ‘tourists’, ‘residents’, ‘exercise’) and correct grammar (e.g. ‘used to be’, ‘nowadays’, ‘I see many tourists’). Keep it concise and coherent.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular. In the past they were uncommon, but nowadays I see many tourists and residents cycling every evening for exercise and leisure, which suggests cycling is growing in popularity.

× I do have a buy one, I was a child and I really like riding a bike.

✓ I bought one when I was a child, and I really liked riding a bike.

This sentence has incorrect verb choice and tense inconsistency. 'Do have a buy one' is ungrammatical; the correct past action is 'bought'. Also maintain past tense for 'was a child' by using 'liked' instead of 'like'. Suggestion: use simple past for completed past actions and keep tense consistent within the sentence. Grammar problem type ID:5

× It's a part of my childhood and also it's fun.

✓ It was part of my childhood, and it was also fun.

The sentence mixes present tense with a past time frame. 'Part of my childhood' refers to the past, so use past tense 'was' for both clauses. Suggestion: align verb tense with the time reference in the sentence. Grammar problem type ID:6

× As for when I'm in grad 3 I used to borrow or buy from my friends and then I usually ride beside my house.

✓ When I was in grade 3, I used to borrow bikes from my friends or sometimes they bought one for me, and I usually rode near my house.

Time clause 'when I'm in grad 3' should be past: 'when I was in grade 3'. 'Borrow or buy from my friends' is unclear; 'borrow bikes from my friends' is clearer. 'Usually ride beside my house' should use past tense 'rode' and 'near my house' is a more natural preposition. Suggestion: use correct past tense for past situations, specify the object 'bikes', and prefer 'near' over 'beside' for location. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Umm, before bike is not popular in my country, but nowadays it seems to be more popular because every evening I see some tourism.

✓ Before, bikes were not popular in my country, but nowadays they seem to be more popular because every evening I see some tourists.

Use plural 'bikes' and past tense 'were' for the earlier period. 'Some tourism' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'tourists' (people). Also match subject 'they' to 'bikes'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements about items and use 'tourists' when referring to people. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Also uh, citizen away using bike to do their exercise and maybe just for fun too.

✓ Also, citizens are now using bikes to exercise and maybe just for fun too.

The original has incorrect singular 'citizen' and awkward 'away using'. Use plural 'citizens' and present continuous or simple present 'are using' or 'use' to describe current habits; 'to do their exercise' is unnatural—use 'to exercise'. Suggestion: ensure noun-number agreement and choose natural collocations like 'use bikes to exercise'. Grammar problem type ID:27