Number— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief qualification), then give one specific example. Use correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and avoid redundancy.

예시: I'm fairly good at remembering important numbers such as birthdays and my phone number. For instance, I always memorise my close family members' birthdays so I can call them on the day, but I sometimes forget less important numbers like store loyalty cards.

제안: Give a clear, complete sentence that explains how numbers relate to your future job. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Provide a specific example of numerical tasks you expect to do.

예시: Yes, I expect to use numbers frequently if I work in the music industry because I would analyse music charts and sales figures. For example, I would track weekly streaming numbers to decide which songs to promote.

제안: Answer directly and correct grammar mistakes. State your opinion, then give a clear reason with one specific detail. Keep sentences concise and coherent using linking words.

예시: Not really — I didn't enjoy math because it wasn't relevant to my interest in classical music composition. As a result, I focused more on theory and practice lessons rather than arithmetic or algebra.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence naming the important numbers, then give a specific, completed example. Fix grammar (plural/singular, articles) and finish the story with a result or feeling. Use linking words for coherence.

예시: Birthdays and phone numbers are most important to me, especially for family and my partner. For example, when I was 20 I forgot my boyfriend's birthday party, so now I make a point of saving all important dates in my calendar to avoid repeating that mistake.

× I'm not sure but I'll try my best to remember important number like birthday or phone number because it is really essential for me whenever I need it.

✓ I'm not sure but I'll try my best to remember important numbers like birthdays or phone numbers because they are really essential for me when I need them.

Errors: singular/plural and article usage. 'number' should be plural 'numbers' when referring to categories; 'birthday or phone number' should be plural 'birthdays or phone numbers' to match general reference. 'It is really essential for me whenever I need it' refers to plural 'numbers', so use plural pronouns: 'they are... when I need them'. Also 'whenever' is acceptable but 'when' is more natural here. Suggestion: match singular/plural consistently and ensure pronouns agree with plural nouns.

× I wish to become an expert in music industry. I think I I will use to. Work in music chart and.

✓ I wish to become an expert in the music industry. I think I will use numbers to work with music charts.

Errors: missing article and broken sentence fragments. 'music industry' requires the definite article 'the' when speaking generally about that industry. The second and third fragments are ungrammatical: 'I think I I will use to.' is incomplete and has repeated 'I'; 'Work in music chart and.' is a fragment. Correction combines intended meaning: using numbers to work with music charts. Suggestion: include necessary articles and complete verbs/objects to form full sentences.

× Not really, I didn't to use to study map because I'm majoring in classical music composition so I. Didn't need it.

✓ Not really. I didn't use to study math because I'm majoring in classical music composition, so I didn't need it.

Errors: incorrect usage 'didn't to use to' should be 'didn't use to' for past habit; 'map' is likely a typo for 'math'. Also sentence fragmentation and punctuation: splitting into proper sentences improves clarity. Suggestion: use correct past-habit structure 'didn't use to' and check word choice ('math').

× Birthday is essential for me especially my family and the boyfriend because when I was 20 I forgot my boyfriend birthday party so my birthday felt.

✓ Birthdays are important to me, especially my family's and my boyfriend's, because when I was 20 I forgot my boyfriend's birthday party and I felt terrible.

Errors: article and possessive forms. 'Birthday is essential' should be plural 'Birthdays are important' when speaking generally. 'my family and the boyfriend' needs possessive forms: 'my family's and my boyfriend's'. 'boyfriend birthday' must be 'boyfriend's birthday'. Final clause 'so my birthday felt' is incomplete and unclear; likely intended emotion, corrected to 'I felt terrible'. Suggestion: use plural when speaking generally, use possessive 's for relationships, and complete the clause to express feeling.