Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要用正确的时态和更自然的表达，并注意句子简洁和连贯。避免重复（如“teach me to a teach me to”），每次回答控制在最多5句。可以先给出主题句，然后用一两句具体例子支持，并用连接词使逻辑更清晰。

예시: Yes. My parents taught me to share when I was a child. For example, in junior high I often brought fruits or snacks to class and shared them with classmates, which helped me make new friends quickly.

제안: 回答应更简洁并修正语法错误（如“because it I can afford it”）。说明原因时用连词并给出具体细节。避免模糊表达，使用更自然的词汇如"affordable"、"they like them too"。

예시: I usually share snacks and fruits with my friends because they are affordable and I enjoy them myself. For instance, I often bring apples or chips to class, and my classmates usually appreciate them.

제안: 注意用词准确（如"password"而不是"passport"），并使用完整连贯的句子。先给出主题句，然后举一两个清晰具体的例子，并解释原因。避免口头语如“Yeah”。

예시: I think personal information should not be shared. For example, I would never share my online banking password or ID details because doing so could lead to financial loss.

제안: 回答要更简洁并修正语法（去掉多余的助动词如“to”）。使用连接词提高流畅性，具体说明分享哪些细节，例如具体哪类家庭作业或哪家餐厅，最多5句内。

예시: Yes. Recently I have been sharing daily updates with my friends, such as details about homework and new restaurants near campus. For example, after class we often discuss assignment deadlines and where to eat.

제안: 表达清晰，注意语法和用词（如"share with"而不是"share to"，"advice for me" → "advice"）。可压缩为2–3句，先给出答案再说明两个具体原因。

예시: I would share good news with my parents first because they always feel proud and happy for me. Also, they can give me useful advice based on their life experience.

제안: 句子不清楚且有重复（如"contact housework contact"）。需先明确要回答的新闻类型，然后举具体例子并说明原因。使用自然表达比如"homework"而非"housework"（如果指作业），并保持逻辑连贯。

예시: I usually share practical news with my friends, such as information about teachers' requests and homework. For example, we exchange details about assignment requirements so we can organize study groups and finish tasks together.

× Yes they do.

✓ Yes, they did.

原句用現在時態“do”與上下文（“When I was a child”）不一致，應使用過去時表示過去發生的事情。建議使用逗號並將動詞改為過去式。

× When I was a child my parents also teach me to a teach me to share with the friends.

✓ When I was a child, my parents also taught me to share with friends.

原句有多處問題：動詞時態應為過去式“taught”以與“was”一致；有重複片段“to a teach me to”；“the friends”中“the”不必要。建議刪除重複、改為過去式並去掉定冠詞。

× So in my junior high school I always take some fruit or snack to my classmate in the free time.

✓ So in junior high school I always took some fruit or snacks to my classmates in my free time.

句子描述過去習慣，動詞應為過去式“took”；“fruit or snack”應使用複數“fruits or snacks”或統一為“some fruit or snacks”；“classmate”應為複數“classmates”；“in the free time”不自然，改為“in my free time”。

× So we have a good we made a new friends when I entered the school.

✓ So we became good friends when I entered the school.

原句結構混亂，有多餘片段“we have a good we made a new friends”。改為簡潔的過去式表達“became good friends”。注意“friends”需與“we”一致。

× For myself, I always share some snacks and or fruits to my friends because it I can afford it and it's not expensive.

✓ For myself, I always share some snacks or fruits with my friends because I can afford them and they're not expensive.

錯誤包括介詞使用和代詞一致性：應用“share ... with”而不是“share ... to”；“and or”不正確，改為“or”；“it I can afford it”多餘且代詞不一致，改為“I can afford them”；“it's”指複數時應用“they're”。

× Additionally, it's my favorite food or snacks so I think my classmate or friends also prefer to eat it.

✓ Additionally, they're my favourite foods or snacks, so I think my classmates or friends also prefer to eat them.

代詞與名詞數不一致：原句用“it's”指複數“foods or snacks”，應為“they're”；“my classmate or friends”數量不一致且冗餘，改為“my classmates or friends”；結尾代詞應為“them”。

× I believe that people shouldn't share personal information, for example, past word Yeah, for example, I never to share my online banking passport to other people.

✓ I believe that people shouldn't share personal information. For example, I never share my online banking password with other people.

原句有多處錯誤：不必要的語氣詞“Yeah”及重複“for example”；“never to share”語法錯誤，去掉“to”；“passport”寫錯，應為“password”；介詞應為“with”而不是“to”。

× The reason that it will make me lose the money.

✓ The reason is that it could make me lose money.

原句用法不自然且冠詞使用多餘：“lose the money”應為“lose money”；根據語境使用情態助動詞“could”或“might”更合適。

× Yes I do. I usually to share some information about my daily life to my friends.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually share some information about my daily life with my friends.

“usually to share”中多出“to”，一般習慣副詞+動詞原形結構“usually share”；介詞應為“with”。

× For example, when I after when after school I will talk about the homework details or restaurant details with my classmates.

✓ For example, after school I will talk about homework details or restaurant recommendations with my classmates.

原句有重複片段“when I after when after”；“homework details or restaurant details”表達笨拙，改為“homework details or restaurant recommendations”。時態“will talk”可以保留表示習慣性將來或常態。

× It is the best way to communicate with.

✓ It is the best way to communicate.

原句末尾缺少介詞賓語或直接句子結尾。簡化為“It is the best way to communicate.”即可完整表達。

× For myself, I prefer to share things to my parents.

✓ For myself, I prefer to share things with my parents.

動詞“share”應與介詞“with”搭配，不能用“to”。

× The reason is that they will feel so happy and proud for me, so I prefer to share happy to with them.

✓ The reason is that they will feel so happy and proud for me, so I prefer to share my happiness with them.

代詞和名詞形式錯誤：“share happy”不正確，應為“share my happiness”；“share ... to”錯誤介詞，改為“with”。

× Additionally, they also can give some advice for me in the future depending on their experience.

✓ Additionally, they can also give me some advice in the future based on their experience.

介詞和詞序需要調整：“give advice to me”可簡化為“give me some advice”；“depending on”在此語境應為“based on”；詞序“can also”較自然放在情態動詞之後。

× Personally, I like to share some information about teachers asking and the contact housework contact because it's the best way for me to finish the housework as a team.

✓ Personally, I like to share information about teachers' requests and household chores because it's the best way for me to finish the housework as a team.

原句有多處問題：“teachers asking”表達不當，改為“teachers' requests”；“the contact housework contact”重複且不通，改為“household chores”；保持代詞“it's”指單數整體情況可以接受。