Language— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence naming the languages, then briefly state proficiency levels. Avoid filler phrases and redundancy. Use linking words (for example, “and” or “but”) to connect ideas.

예시: I speak four languages: English, Hindi, Punjabi and a little French. English, Hindi and Punjabi are fluent for me, but I’m a beginner in French.

제안: Organize the response: give a clear opinion sentence, then support with one or two specific reasons or an example. Reduce redundancy (e.g., avoid repeating “never”). Use linking words like “because” or “for example.” Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I find learning a new language quite difficult because you must master speaking, listening and grammar. For example, when I studied French for two years in the IB, I practiced three to four hours a day to improve my pronunciation and vocabulary.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer (Yes/No/Not at the moment), then give a concise reason and a future plan. Avoid contradictory phrasing and repetitive words like “because” twice. Use linking words such as “however” or “but” correctly.

예시: Not right now, because I don’t have enough time for the daily practice a new language needs. However, I plan to learn Spanish after my undergraduate studies because I want to travel to Spanish-speaking countries.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence explaining the main reason, then add one clear supporting detail. Avoid grammatical errors and incomplete sentences; remove repetition. Use linking words like “because” or “so” correctly.

예시: I learned English because it is widely used across India and internationally, which makes travel and communication much easier. For instance, when I visit other Indian states or travel abroad, English helps me communicate with people from different language backgrounds.

× I can speak 4 languages, three of them I can speak fluently, but one language I'm still at a beginner level so the languages are English, Hindi, Punjabi and a little bit of French.

✓ I can speak four languages: three of them I can speak fluently, but one I am still at a beginner level; the languages are English, Hindi, Punjabi and a little bit of French.

The original mixes numeral style and has redundancy and punctuation issues rather than strict plural problems. Correction uses 'four' spelled out and removes redundant 'language' after 'one'. Use a colon or semicolon to separate list and clause. Also expand contraction 'I'm' to 'I am' for clarity in formal speech. Suggestion: write numbers under ten as words, avoid repeating nouns unnecessarily, and separate clauses with appropriate punctuation.

× I think it's one of the most difficult subjects because as I was in my IB, I had French for two years and it was a new language for me.

✓ I think it's one of the most difficult subjects because when I was in my IB, I studied French for two years and it was a new language to me.

The phrase 'as I was in my IB' is awkward; 'when I was in my IB' is correct. 'I had French' is a non-standard way to say 'I studied French' (past tense). Use 'studied' to indicate past learning. Also use 'new to me' rather than 'for me'. Suggestion: use clear past tense verbs like 'studied' and time clauses beginning with 'when' for past situations.

× I've never ever learnt it in my whole life and to cope up with the speaking skills, listening new words, pronunciations, grammars, I had to daily practice for at least three to four hours.

✓ I had never learnt it before, and to improve my speaking skills, learn new words, and practice pronunciation and grammar, I had to practice daily for at least three to four hours.

Errors include wrong tense order ('I've never ever learnt it in my whole life' should be 'I had never learnt it before' in past context), inappropriate phrase 'to cope up with' (use 'to improve' or 'to cope with'), wrong noun forms 'listening new words, pronunciations, grammars' (use 'learn new words', 'pronunciation', 'grammar'), and incorrect adverb placement 'daily practice' (use 'practice daily'). Suggestion: use parallel structure for lists (verbs in same form), use 'practice daily', and use uncountable nouns 'grammar' and 'pronunciation'.

× I think not currently or not right now because I don't have that much time to focus on some another language and learn it properly because it requires daily practice.

✓ I don't plan to right now because I don't have enough time to focus on another language and learn it properly, since it requires daily practice.

The original 'I think not currently or not right now' is awkward and uses modal-like phrasing incorrectly. Use 'I don't plan to right now' to express intention. 'some another language' is incorrect — use 'another language'. 'that much' is colloquial; 'enough' is clearer. Suggestion: use clear modal/intent expressions ('I don't plan to'), avoid 'some another' and prefer 'another', and use 'enough' for quantity.

× But however I do plan to learn Spanish after my undergraduation is over because I really do want to travel to that country to visit.

✓ However, I do plan to learn Spanish after I finish my undergraduate degree because I really want to travel to Spain.

Use 'However' (not 'But however') and rephrase 'after my undergraduation is over' to 'after I finish my undergraduate degree'. 'travel to that country to visit' is redundant and vague; specify 'Spain' rather than 'that country'. Suggestion: avoid redundant conjunctions ('But however'), use standard terms ('undergraduate degree'), and be specific when possible.

× English is a universal language so I had to learn it so that I will I would be able to travel international or even within my country.

✓ English is a universal language, so I had to learn it so that I would be able to travel internationally or even within my country.

Problems: tense/modal inconsistency 'will I would' — choose 'would' for past reason; 'travel international' incorrect adjective use — use adverb 'internationally'. Add comma before 'so'. Suggestion: maintain consistent modal tense ('would' for conditional/past reasons) and use adverbs for verbs ('travel internationally').

× So I can travel in any other state and.

✓ So I can travel to any other state.

Original sentence is incomplete and ends with 'and.' Remove the dangling conjunction and use the correct preposition 'to' with 'travel to a state'. Suggestion: avoid leaving sentences unfinished; ensure each sentence has a verb and a complete object or clause.