Relax— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and clear but has some grammatical errors, slight redundancy and could be more concise. Improve sentence structure (use 'go to the park', 'sit on a bench'), avoid repeating the same idea and add one specific detail to enrich the response. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I usually go to the park near my house to relax. I sit on a bench and breathe the fresh air to relieve stress from my busy schedule. Sometimes I watch people or read a short book while I'm there.

제안: Good content but repetitive and some grammar errors (e.g. 'a beneficial' incorrect; unnecessary fillers 'well well'). Start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words for reasons, and limit redundancy. Be specific about the activity and its benefit.

예시: I usually relax alone because I find it better for my mental and physical health. For example, when I'm stressed I take a five- to ten-minute walk around the park and then sit quietly to focus on my breathing, which helps me calm down.

제안: Your opinion is expressed but the answer is unclear due to repetition and grammatical mistakes ('it depend', 'a relaxing a relaxing', 'at alone'). Begin with a clear stance, use linking words ('however', 'because') to explain reasons, and give one specific example of what you find more relaxing. Avoid repeating phrases.

예시: It depends on personal preference, but I personally find physical activities more relaxing than listening to music. For instance, I prefer jogging or doing light exercises because the movement helps reduce my stress more effectively; I also find a short nap refreshing.

제안: You list useful activities but the answer is incomplete and contains grammar issues (use 'a 15- to 20-minute walk', 'spend time with my family'). Provide a concise topic sentence, then 1–2 specific supporting details with linking words, and finish the response. Avoid trailing off.

예시: I have several routines to relax. I usually wake up early and go for a 15- to 20-minute walk, and afterwards I spend some time talking with my family to share how I feel, which helps me unwind.

× For relaxation, I usually go in the park which is located near my house.

✓ For relaxation, I usually go to the park which is located near my house.

Use 'go to' for visiting places; 'go in the park' is incorrect. Use 'to' with 'go' plus a destination: 'go to the park'. Suggestion: Use 'go to + place' for destinations.

× I always sit there in the bench and breathe fresh air to release my stress from busy schedule.

✓ I always sit there on the bench and breathe fresh air to relieve my stress from a busy schedule.

Use 'on the bench' not 'in the bench'. Also use the article 'a' before 'busy schedule' and 'relieve' is the correct verb collocation with 'stress'. Suggestion: Use 'on the bench', 'relieve stress', and 'a busy schedule'.

× Well well honestly I usually relax alone as I think it's a beneficial for my physical and mental health as whenever I am feeling stressed I usually do 5 to 10 minutes walk around the park and sometimes I sit there and breathe fresh air.

✓ Well, honestly I usually relax alone because I think it's beneficial for my physical and mental health. Whenever I feel stressed, I usually take a 5 to 10 minute walk around the park, and sometimes I sit there and breathe fresh air.

Remove repeated 'well', use 'because' not 'as' for cause clarity, 'it's beneficial' not 'it's a beneficial' (beneficial is adjective), use 'feel' instead of 'am feeling' for habitual action, and use 'take a 5 to 10 minute walk' for correct noun phrase and hyphenation. Split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'because' for reasons, adjective without 'a', and 'take a X-minute walk' for routine actions.

× Well I think it depend on the preference but I don't think listening to music is a relaxing a relaxing 'cause I believe spending time on exercises, jogging or sitting alone at alone is the best way to relaxing.

✓ Well, I think it depends on personal preference, but I don't find listening to music relaxing because I believe exercising, jogging, or sitting alone is the best way to relax.

Use 'depends' to match the singular subject 'it' (subject-verb agreement). Remove repeated 'a relaxing' and 'at alone' is incorrect. Use 'personal preference' and gerunds/nouns correctly: 'exercising' rather than 'spending time on exercises'. Use infinitive 'to relax' after 'way'. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with subject, avoid repetition, and use correct verb forms after 'way'.

× I also considered a short nap is also relaxing.

✓ I also consider a short nap relaxing.

Use present tense 'consider' to match current opinion. Do not use 'considered' (past) and avoid redundant 'also'. Use 'a short nap relaxing' instead of 'a short nap is also relaxing'. Suggestion: Use present tense for current beliefs and concise structure 'consider X Y'.

× I do a lot of things to make me relax such as I get up early in the morning and do 15 to 20 minutes walk and after that I spend some time with my family to feel relaxed and share my emotions.

✓ I do a lot of things to help me relax, such as getting up early in the morning and doing a 15 to 20 minute walk; after that I spend some time with my family to feel relaxed and share my feelings.

Use 'help me relax' instead of 'make me relax'. Use gerunds after 'such as' and 'a 15 to 20 minute walk' with article and hyphen. 'Share my emotions' is unnatural; 'share my feelings' is better. Also punctuation to separate ideas improves clarity. Suggestion: Use 'such as' + gerund phrases, include article with time expressions, and prefer 'feelings' for emotional sharing.

× After that I also.

✓ After that, I also do other relaxing activities.

Original is a sentence fragment lacking a verb and object. Provide a complete clause to complete the thought. Suggestion: Always include a main verb and object; avoid sentence fragments.