Teacher— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сократите повторения, исправьте ошибки в построении предложений и используйте связующие слова для более логичного изложения. Например, назовите учителя, опишите одну-две конкретные черты и объясните, почему они важны. Избегайте лишних слов и провалов в грамматике (например, «she studied me» → «she taught me»).

예시: My favourite teacher is Miss Nana. She taught me English in eighth grade and was very kind and inspiring. For example, she encouraged me to speak up in class and always gave helpful feedback, which improved my confidence.

제안: Будьте краткими и ясными: прямо ответьте «да» или «нет», затем объясните причину одной-двумя связными фразами. Избегайте повторов и неясных уточнений (например, «I finished just on 8th class»). Если упоминаете проблемы с одноклассниками, сформулируйте это аккуратно и логично.

예시: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teacher anymore because I left that school after eighth grade. However, I still keep in contact with my teacher from university who supports me.

제안: Избегайте противоречий (сначала «didn't help», затем хвалите). Начните с чёткой топик-фразы, затем приведите конкретные примеры помощи и эффект. Используйте правильные времена и форму глаголов (например, «she taught me»).

예시: Miss Liana had a huge impact on me. She taught me practical study skills and always encouraged me to set goals; for example, she helped me prepare for exams and boosted my confidence, which changed my attitude to learning.

제안: Дайте чёткий ответ и добавьте короткое объяснение плана. Уточните сроки и специальность грамотно, избегайте повторов («English like English teacher»). Используйте связующие слова для ясности.

예시: Yes, I plan to be an English teacher in about four years because I am studying at the University of Pedagogy. I hope to teach primary school children and help them develop basic language skills.

× Yes, of course I have a my favorite teacher, her name is Miss Nana.

✓ Yes, of course I have a favorite teacher; her name is Miss Nana.

The original sentence contains an extra article 'a' before 'my', which is incorrect with the possessive pronoun 'my'. Use either 'a favorite teacher' or 'my favorite teacher'. Also the comma splice is better fixed with a semicolon or a period to separate independent clauses. Suggestions: remove the redundant 'a' or change 'my' to 'a', and separate clauses properly.

× She's very kind and strong and also she's very educational.

✓ She's very kind and strict, and she's also very knowledgeable as a teacher.

'Strong' is awkward for describing a teacher's personality or style; 'educational' describes something that educates, not a person's quality. Use 'strict' or 'firm' for discipline and 'knowledgeable' or 'educational as a teacher' to describe teaching ability. Suggestions: choose words that clearly describe a person's traits (e.g., 'kind', 'strict', 'knowledgeable').

× She studied me at the 8th course in in English and I she's very ambitious.

✓ She taught me English in the 8th grade, and she is very ambitious.

'Studied me' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'taught' when referring to a teacher instructing a student. '8th course' is unnatural; use '8th grade'. There is an extra 'in' and a merged 'I she's' which is ungrammatical; split into proper clauses and use 'she is'. Suggestions: use 'taught me', '8th grade', remove duplicate words and ensure subject and verb match.

× I liked her and I want to be like her.

✓ I liked her and I want to be like her.

This sentence mixes past 'liked' with present 'want', which can be acceptable if intended (I liked her in the past and now want to be like her). If the speaker means they still like her, use 'I like her and I want to be like her.' Suggestions: decide whether the admiration is past or present and keep tenses consistent.

× No, I'm not still in touch with my primary school teacher 'cause I finished just on 8th class 8th grade and I had my school.

✓ No, I'm not still in touch with my primary school teacher because I finished 8th grade and left that school.

'I'm not still in touch' is unnatural; say 'I'm not in touch' or 'I am no longer in touch'. 'Finished just on 8th class 8th grade' is awkward—use 'finished 8th grade'. 'I had my school' is unclear; use 'left that school' or 'I left school.' Suggestions: simplify to 'I am no longer in touch' and use standard phrasing 'finished 8th grade' and 'left that school'.

× My friends like that were rude to me and also bullying, they bullied me but I still in touch with my University School teacher.

✓ Friends at that time were rude to me and bullied me, but I am still in touch with my university teacher.

'My friends like that' is unclear; use 'friends at that time'. 'Also bullying' is incorrect; use past simple 'bullied me'. 'I still in touch' lacks a verb; use 'I am still in touch'. 'University School teacher' is redundant—use 'university teacher' or 'school teacher' appropriately. Suggestions: use clear time phrases, correct past tense for actions, and include the verb 'am' for 'still in touch'.

× Actually my teachers didn't help me but as I told you, Miss Liana, give me like give me back to life.

✓ Actually my teachers didn't help me, but as I told you, Miss Liana brought me back to life.

'Give me like give me back to life' is ungrammatical and literal. Use a natural English idiom such as 'brought me back to life' or 'gave me my confidence back'. Also ensure verb tense agreement: 'bring' in past is 'brought'. Suggestions: use idiomatic expressions and correct past tense forms.

× She teach me, she teach me how to live and she inspired me and I'm still alive of the help of her.

✓ She taught me how to live and she inspired me, and I am still alive thanks to her help.

Use past tense 'taught' for actions completed in the past. 'I'm still alive of the help of her' is ungrammatical; use 'I am still alive thanks to her help' or 'I am still here because of her help.' Suggestions: use past tense for past actions and natural prepositional phrases like 'thanks to' or 'because of'.

× Yes, I will be teacher in the future after four years 'cause I study in the University of Pedagogy and I will be a teacher of English like English teacher and also a teacher for primary schoolers children.

✓ Yes, I will be a teacher in four years because I am studying at the University of Pedagogy, and I will be an English teacher as well as a primary school teacher.

Missing article 'a' before 'teacher'. Use 'in four years' rather than 'after four years'. 'I study in the University' should be 'I am studying at the University'. 'Teacher of English like English teacher' is redundant; use 'English teacher'. 'Primary schoolers children' is incorrect; use 'primary school children' or 'primary school students'. Suggestions: include articles, use 'am studying at', choose concise role descriptions, and correct noun order like 'primary school children'.